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Some people prefer to eat at food stands or restaurant. Other people prefer to prepare and eat food at home. Which do you prefer? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. v.1

Some people prefer to eat at food stands or restaurant. Other people prefer to prepare and eat food at home. Which do you prefer? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. v. 1
As the number of private cars has increased, so has the level of pollution. Over-reliance on cars at the expense of public transport has made this problem even worse, causing many concerned citizens to look for a solution to the problem. One potential solution to this issue is to discourage the use of private cars by raising taxes. If the cost of petrol was increased, then many people would consider using alternative forms of transportation or even walking. Admittedly, there would be a number of complaints from car drivers, but these would not be of much importance when balanced against the environmental benefits. Another solution could be to look at more specific causes of the issue. Modern cars are fitted with cleaner-burning engines and catalytic converters. Accordingly, they do not cause much of an environmental hazard as any older cars. In Japan, for example, cars are heavily taxed once they have been on the road for three years or more, encouraging people to buy new cars which pollute less. By heavily taxing older vehicles from the road, some of the worst polluting vehicles would be taken off the road. However, this would not be fair to those who cannot afford a new car with such regularity. An improvement in the quality and efficiency of public transit would also encourage people to use their cars less. In London, for instance, a system has been operating for some time in which people are allocated days of the week when they can use their cars. On days that they are not allowed to drive, public transit is taken. Although there are potential solutions to the trouble, none of them are perfect. Only by a concerted effort by both the government and the public can this situation truly be resolved.
As the number of private
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cars
has increased,
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so
has the level of pollution. Over-reliance on
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cars
at the expense of
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public
transport has made this problem even worse, causing
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many
concerned citizens to look for a
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solution
to the problem.

One potential
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solution
to this issue is to discourage the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
use
of private
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cars
by raising taxes. If the cost of petrol
was increased
, then
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many
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people
would consider using alternative forms of transportation or even walking.
Admittedly
, there would be a number of complaints from
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car
drivers,
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but
these would not be of much importance when balanced against the environmental benefits.

Another
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solution
could be to look at more specific causes of the issue. Modern
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cars
are fitted
with cleaner-burning engines and catalytic converters.
Accordingly
, they do not cause much of an environmental hazard as any older
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cars
. In Japan,
for example
,
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cars
are
heavily
taxed once they have been on the road for three years or more, encouraging
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people
to
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buy
new
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cars
which pollute less. By
heavily
taxing older vehicles from the road,
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some
of the worst polluting vehicles would
be taken
off the road.
However
, this would not be
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fair
to those who cannot afford a new
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car
with such regularity.

An improvement in the quality and efficiency of
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public
transit would
also
encourage
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people
to
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use
their
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cars
less. In London,
for instance
, a system has been operating for
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some
time in which
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people
are allocated
days of the week when they can
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use
their
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cars
. On days that they are not
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allowed
to drive,
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public
transit
is taken
.

Although there are potential
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solutions
to the trouble, none of them are perfect.
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Only
by a concerted effort by both the
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government
and the
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public
can this situation
truly
be resolved
.
7Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7Mistakes
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Flora Lewis

IELTS essay Some people prefer to eat at food stands or restaurant. Other people prefer to prepare and eat food at home. Which do you prefer? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. v. 1

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
296 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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