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Essay topic: Some people prefer to eat at food stands or restaurants. Other people prefer to prepare and eat food at home. Which do you prefer? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. v.1

Essay topic: Some people prefer to eat at food stands or restaurants. Other people prefer to prepare and eat food at home. Which do you prefer? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. v. 1
It is true that some languages are currently on the verge of extinction. One school of thought suggests that governments should allocate some budget to preserve these languages, while others and I believe that such attempts are a waste of money. There are several reasons why some endangered languages are considered not worth saving. Firstly, the cost of saving languages will certainly cost a large amount of money and a few people particularly can get benefit from them. After that, it leads the growth of financial burden on its nation. Therefore, governments should invest more funds to other important matters, including education, public transport and health because they can certainly save many lives. Moreover, it might be ineffective even if the government makes a lot of effort for saving less widely languages. In other words, the lack of willingness to study for a reason, it might be impractical for them. I believe that, the government should not encourage people to learn if they not willing to. Thus, they should focus on improving important sectors. However, a language is much more than simply a means of communication, behind the language itself, there is culture, custom and tradition related to it. If an endangered language become extinct, then it means that its cultural identity may disappear and also knowledge about its civilization remains unknown. Hence, the authorities should spend some amount of money on minority language preservation, then a vast amount of cultural heritages can be saved in the meantime. In conclusion, while it is true that saving local languages is crucial for some people, in my opinion, it is more important for the government to invest in essential services like health and education.
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languages
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thought
suggests that
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governments
should allocate
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some
budget to preserve these
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languages
, while others and I believe that such attempts are a waste of money.

There are several reasons why
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some
endangered
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languages
are considered
not worth
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saving
.
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, the cost of
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saving
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languages
will
certainly
cost a large amount of money and a few
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people
particularly
can
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get
benefit from them. After that, it leads the growth of financial burden on its nation.
Therefore
,
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governments
should invest more funds to other
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important
matters, including education, public transport and health
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because
they can
certainly
save
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many
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lives
.
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government
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makes
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a lot of
effort for
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saving
less
widely
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languages
.
In other words
, the lack of willingness to study for a reason, it might be impractical for them. I believe that, the
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government
should not encourage
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people
to learn if
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they not willing
to.
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, they should focus on improving
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important
sectors.

However
, a
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language
is much more than
simply
a means of communication, behind the
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language
itself, there is culture, custom and tradition related to it. If an endangered
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language
become extinct, then it means that its cultural identity may disappear and
also
knowledge about its civilization remains unknown.
Hence
, the authorities should spend
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some
amount of money on minority
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language
preservation, then a vast amount of cultural heritages can
be saved
in the meantime.

In conclusion
, while it is true that
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saving
local
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languages
is crucial for
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some
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people
, in my opinion, it is more
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important
for the
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government
to invest in essential services like health and education.
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7Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay Essay topic: Some people prefer to eat at food stands or restaurants. Other people prefer to prepare and eat food at home. Which do you prefer? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
282 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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