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149. Imagine that you have received some land to use as you wish. How would you use this land? Use specific details to explain your answer. v.1

149. Imagine that you have received some land to use as you wish. How would you use this land? Use specific details to explain your answer. v. 1
Customers shopping in the malls forced or may have resulted in closing the small local shops during the past years. Every change has certain advantages and disadvantages. Whereas, the increased interest of shopping in the shopping centers has contributed towards the closure of small shops, but on the other hand, it’s time saving and bringing a variety of items in one place for the consumer to choose. Nowadays, plenty of people prefer malls over the other places to shop because the shopping complexes have enhanced the buying experience than ever before, by providing the daily used items such as clothes, groceries and the other essentials under the same roof. Consequently, people don’t have to run places by places to look for different products. Hence, it increased the consumer’s convenience level and also brought multiple brands offering a variety of items at discounted prices to the customers to attract. In addition, shopping in the same place for different items is allowing shoppers to enjoy their time being in a shopping mall. Now they are relaxed, drinking beverages while shopping. Furthermore, purchasing has become an activity full of enjoyment for couples hanging-out together holding each others’ hand while shopping and also allowing them to spend time together. Apart from this some other people feel that the rise in the demand of shopping malls shrunk the small shop owners and forced them up to an extent from where it has become very hard for them to recover and now they are unable to stabilize their financial situations. Eventually, they are challenged by the circumstances, and taking higher debt to buy stores in these shopping complexes for their living. In conclusion, I firmly believe that everything needs to change with time and the things which don’t time replaces them itself. Therefore, every change is for good and the introduction of malls is a positive sign for the consumers.
Customers
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shopping
in the
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malls
forced or may have resulted in closing the
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small
local
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shops
during the past years. Every
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change
has certain advantages and disadvantages. Whereas, the increased interest of
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shopping
in the
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shopping
centers has contributed towards the closure of
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small
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shops
,
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but
on the
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other
hand, it’s
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time
saving and bringing a variety of
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items
in one
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place
for the consumer to choose.

Nowadays,
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plenty
of
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people
prefer
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malls
over the
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other
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places
to
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shop
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because
the
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shopping
complexes have enhanced the buying experience than ever
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before
, by providing the daily
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used
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items
such as clothes, groceries and the
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other
essentials under the same roof.
Consequently
,
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people
don’t
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have to
run
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places
by
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places
to look for
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different
products.
Hence
, it increased the consumer’s convenience level and
also
brought multiple brands offering a variety of
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items
at discounted prices to the customers to attract.
In addition
,
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shopping
in the same
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place
for
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different
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items
is allowing shoppers to enjoy their
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time
being in a
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shopping
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mall
.
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Now
they
are relaxed
, drinking beverages while
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shopping
.
Furthermore
, purchasing has become an activity full of enjoyment for couples hanging-out together holding each
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others’
hand while
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shopping
and
also
allowing them to spend
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time
together.

Apart from this
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some
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other
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people
feel that the rise in the demand of
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shopping
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malls
shrunk the
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small
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shop
owners and forced them up to an extent from where it has become
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very
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hard
for them to recover and
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now
they are unable to stabilize their financial situations.
Eventually
, they
are challenged
by the circumstances, and taking higher debt to
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buy
stores in these
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shopping
complexes for their living.

In conclusion
, I
firmly
believe that everything needs to
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change
with
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time
and the things which don’t
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time
replaces them itself.
Therefore
, every
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change
is for
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good
and the introduction of
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malls
is a
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positive
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sign
for the consumers.
7Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7Mistakes
If we spoke a different language, we would perceive a somewhat different world.
Ludwig Wittgenstein

IELTS essay 149. Imagine that you have received some land to use as you wish. How would you use this land? Use specific details to explain your answer. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
314 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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