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Some people like to watch the news on television. Other people prefer to read the news on the newspaper. Still others use their computers to get the news. How do you prefer to be informed about the news and why? Use specific reasons and examples to suppor v.2

Some people like to watch the news on television. Other people prefer to read the news on the newspaper. Still others use their computers to get the news. How do you prefer to be informed about the news and why? Use specific reasons and examples to suppor v. 2
In the present world, several facilities should be spent by the state. There are those who say that pontificate should pay more money on a variety of train lines than roads. According to the individual idea, I completely agree with the statement. The supporting reasons will be discussed throughout the essay. The government have to far invest in rail line as seen as to be the most important for various reasons. The first and possibly the most obvious reason is reducing environmental problems when people drive a car, which releases the toxins smoggy into the air. Additionally, if the authority to invest in the construction of the evaluated trains effectively, the commuters are likely to service these vehicles resulting in avoiding traffic congestion as well as the fewest cars are used, the less carbon dioxide is emitted. Another important point to consider is less accidents, the railway system need to carry passengers to their destination carefully by stable speed. If government officials bring the budget for renovating the quality of tracks, resulting in more convenient. A clear illustration of this is that unless the crowed road mostly occur numerous accidents per day if countries have a sufficient railway line that can attract more and more people come to transport whether students or workers. Besides, the railways have guaranteed welfare and insurance for the people who are passengers. To summarise, the investment on road does not have the necessary because if people have good rail systems. Therefore, it is clear that people regard safety and expenditure. As a suggestion, the government launch campaign to educate people concerning expanding railway over all the stations.
In the present world, several facilities should
be spent
by the state. There are those who say that pontificate should pay more money on a variety of train lines than roads. According to the individual
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
idea
, I completely
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
agree
with the statement. The supporting reasons will
be discussed
throughout the essay.

The
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government
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
have to
far invest in rail line as
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
seen
as to be the most
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
important
for various reasons.
Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Consider rewording the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
The
first
and
possibly
the most obvious reason is reducing environmental problems when
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
drive a car, which releases the toxins smoggy into the air.
Additionally
, if the authority to invest in the construction of the evaluated trains
effectively
, the commuters are likely to service these vehicles resulting in avoiding traffic congestion
as well
as the fewest cars are
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
used
, the less carbon dioxide
is emitted
.

Another
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
important
point to consider is
Did you mean "fewer"? The noun accidents is countable.
less
accidents, the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
railway
system need to carry passengers to their destination
carefully
by stable speed. If
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
government
officials bring the budget for renovating the quality of
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
tracks
, resulting in more convenient. A
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
clear
illustration of this is that unless the crowed road
mostly
occur numerous accidents per day if countries have a sufficient
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
railway
line that can attract more and more
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
come
to transport whether students or workers.
Besides
, the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
railways
have guaranteed welfare and insurance for the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
who are passengers.

To
Possible spelling mistake. 'summarise' is British English.
summarise
, the investment on road does not have the necessary
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
because
if
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
have
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
good
rail systems.
Therefore
, it is
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
clear
that
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
regard safety and expenditure. As a suggestion, the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
government
launch campaign to educate
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
concerning expanding
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
railway
over all the stations.
7Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7Mistakes

IELTS essay Some people like to watch the news on television. Other people prefer to read the news on the newspaper. Still others use their computers to get the news. How do you prefer to be informed about the news and why? Use specific reasons and examples to suppor v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
272 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
  • ?
    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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