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Many filmmakers made movie based on books. When a movie is produced based on books, some people prefer to read books before watching films, other people choose to watch movie first. What do you think? v.2

Many filmmakers made movie based on books. When a movie is produced based on books, some people prefer to read books before watching films, other people choose to watch movie first. What do you think? v. 2
Films play a vital role in our lives. they are the main way for our entertainments. Some people believe that it is better to read books before watching the movies based on them, Others, prefer to watch movie first. Personally, I agree with second opinion which prefer watching movie first for several reasons which I will explore them in my essay. To begin with, It is more exciting to see a movie without knowing any ideas about what will happen. Moreover, You will pay more attention to catch up every single scene in the movie. However, If you read the book, You could lose some of your desire to know the details of the movie as you know the end of the story. I remember when I bough Titanic story for my daughter last year. She was very excited about reading this story as I kept telling her that it was my favorite movie. She spent four hours in a row to finish it. A week latter, I found that Titanic movie is available in the movie theater by our house. We decided to have a movie night in the week end. In this day I was so excited as I though that my daughter will be surprised by the movie. I shocked when I found her playing on her phone without paying any attention to the movie. When I asked her about the reason, She told me that she knows already what will happen previously from the book and she feels that she is bored. Secondly, If you watched the movie first, You would be in the characters' shoes. You would feel the same feeling in each scene as if you live the story. In other hand, If you read the book, You already have an idea about each character. Therefore, You would not enjoy sharing their feeling in the movie to that extend. Last but not least, Watching a movie first could help you saving time if you have a time frame for your entertainment. If you started reading the book related to the movie, You could not have enough time to complete it. Therefore, you would be stuck between a rock and a hard place. You would either reread the book again to remember the story which means waste of time or ignore this story for this moment in case you do not have enough time to finish the book. Unfortunately, both choices could affect your impression about this story negatively. In sum, There are many ways to enjoy watching a movie. Either by reading its story first in a book or watching it before reading its related story book. Each method has its advantages and disadvantages. You are the only person who can choose the best way to enjoy your watching ti maximum.
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believe that it is better to read
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books
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before
watching the
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movies
based on them, Others, prefer to
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watch
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movie
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first
.
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with second opinion which prefer watching
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movie
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first
for several reasons which I will explore them in my essay.

To
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with, It is more exciting to
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a
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without knowing any
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ideas
about what will happen.
Moreover
, You will pay more attention to catch up every single scene in the
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movie
.
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, If you read the
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book
, You could lose
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of your desire to know the
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of the
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movie
as you know the
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end
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story
. I remember when I
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Titanic
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story
for my daughter last year. She was
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excited about
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reading
this
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story
as I
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kept
telling her that it was my favorite
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movie
. She spent four hours in a row to finish it. A week latter, I found that Titanic
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movie
is available in the
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movie
theater by our
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house
. We decided to have a
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movie
night in the week
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end
. In this day I was
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excited as I though that my daughter will
be surprised
by the
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movie
. I shocked when I found her playing on her phone without paying any attention to the
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movie
. When I asked her about the reason, She
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told
me that she knows already what will happen previously from the
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book and
she feels that she
is bored
.

Secondly
, If you
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, You would be in the
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. In other hand, If you read the
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, You already have an
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about each character.
Therefore
, You would not enjoy sharing their feeling in the
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movie
to that extend.

Last
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not least, Watching a
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could
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if you have a
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frame for your entertainment. If you
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reading
the
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related to the
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, You could not have
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to complete it.
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place. You would either reread the
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again to remember the
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story
which means waste of
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time
or
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this
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for this moment in case you do not have
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enough
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time
to finish the
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. Unfortunately, both choices could affect your impression about this
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story
negatively
.

In sum, There are
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many
ways to enjoy watching a
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movie
. Either by
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reading
its
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story
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first
in a
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book
or watching it
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its related
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. Each method has its advantages and disadvantages. You are the
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only
person who can choose the best way to enjoy your watching ti maximum.
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49Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay Many filmmakers made movie based on books. When a movie is produced based on books, some people prefer to read books before watching films, other people choose to watch movie first. What do you think? v. 2

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
467 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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