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Nowadays, many movies or films are based on books. Some people prefer to read the original book before they watch the movie, other prefer to watch the movie before reading the book. Which one do you prefer? v.2

Nowadays, many movies or films are based on books. Some people prefer to read the original book before they watch the movie, other prefer to watch the movie before reading the book. Which one do you prefer? v. 2
Reading a book and watching a movie are two main activities that people do in their free time. So, these two actions are critical for people. In my opinion, it is better to watch a movie before reading the book. Here you can see my reasons. First, watching the movie is more exciting. Nowadays, new technology has an important effect on filmmaking. It allows that filmmakers produce a ver exciting and interesting visual effects in their movie. However, when we read a book, we do not see any special scene to help us to recognize the situation and the story. This event reduces the effects of the book to be interesting for us. And most of the time we prefer to give up from reading. Second, saving the time is another noticeable reason. Today' s people must either study or work hard to built and manage their lives. So, they try to utilize from their time in a way that brings a lot of benefit for them. Also, they avoid from time wasting. In this situation people prefer to watch amoive at first. In fact, watching a movie just takes 2 hours, but reading a book takes more than two hours. And people can watch the movie and if they have free time then they can read a book. On the contrary, some people think reading a book before watching a movie is better. Mainly, they can save their money. By emerging economic crisis around the world, people have a lot of trouble for managing their lives. So, they avoid from any unwanted money wasting. Buying a book just needs 10 dollars, but buying a movie needs more that 10 dollars. So, people’s tendency is toward reading a book at first. In fact, they read the book to recognize about the subject of the movie, and if it is interesting, they can go to watch a movie. However, I still declare that it is better to watch the movie first because they do not need to buy a book and they can save money. Also, they can ask from other people bout the subject instead of paying money for the book. According to my passage, there are a lot of reasons to prove my claim that reading a book before watching the movie is a good idea.
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and watching a
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are two main activities that
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do in their free
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.
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. In my opinion, it is better to
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a
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movie
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before
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. Here you can
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my reasons.

First
, watching the
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movie
is more exciting. Nowadays, new technology has an
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important
effect on filmmaking. It
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allows
that filmmakers produce a
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exciting and interesting visual effects in their
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movie
.
However
, when we read a
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, we do not
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any special scene to
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us to recognize the situation and the story. This
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reduces
the effects of the
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to be interesting for us. And most of the
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we prefer to give up from reading.

Second, saving the
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is another noticeable reason.
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either study or work
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hard
to built and manage their
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lives
.
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So
, they try to utilize from their
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time
in a way that brings
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a lot of
benefit for them.
Also
, they avoid from
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time wasting
. In this situation
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people
prefer to
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first
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takes 2 hours,
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takes more than two hours. And
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people
can
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watch
the
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and if they have free
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then they can read a book.

On the contrary
,
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watching a
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is better.
Mainly
, they can save their
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money
. By emerging economic crisis around the world,
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people
have
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a lot of
trouble for managing their
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lives
.
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So
, they avoid from any unwanted
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money
wasting. Buying a
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needs 10 dollars,
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buying a
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needs more that 10 dollars.
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,
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a
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at
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. In fact, they read the
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to recognize about the subject of the
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, and if it is interesting, they can go to
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.
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declare that it is better to
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the
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first
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they do not need to
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book and
they can save
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money
.
Also
, they can ask from other
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people
bout the subject
instead
of paying
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for the book.

According to my passage, there are
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a lot of
reasons to prove my claim that
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reading
a
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before
watching the
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is a
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.
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53Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay Nowadays, many movies or films are based on books. Some people prefer to read the original book before they watch the movie, other prefer to watch the movie before reading the book. Which one do you prefer? v. 2

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
387 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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