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Some people like to travel with a companion. Other people prefer to travel alone. Which one do you prefer? v.3

Some people like to travel with a companion. Other people prefer to travel alone. Which one do you prefer? v. 3
Some people prefer to travel with a companion. However, other people like to travel alone. Personally, I think these two options have their advantages and disadvantages. I state my opinion on the following points. From the one side, travelling with a companion can bring many benefits. First of all, travelling with a companion is safer for several reasons. If travellers got lost in a strange city it is easier to find a way back. They can support and help each other if something happened and one of them is hurt. As for me, I prefer to travel with a companion if we travel by car. I think it is very dangerous to be on a strange road by one's self. One more reason to have a companion in a car is that they can change each other if one of them is tired. Second of all, travelling with a companion is more exciting and interesting. They can share all beautiful moments and new experiences. Finally, it helps to save some money because companions can share all expenses on gas, hotels, etc. From the other side, travelling alone can bring many benefits too. For example, one does not have to do things he does not want to. If one is tired he does not have to go to a bar with his friend only because he does not want to leave him alone. Moreover, sometimes I personally want to be alone and enjoy all beauty around me. I can relax and contemplate about my life sitting on a beautiful cliff. To sum up, I think travelling with a companion is better. However, sometimes I prefer to be alone by myself in a strange city. It gives me the feeling of adventure and I like that.
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people
prefer to
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travel
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companion
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other
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people
like to
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travel
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alone
.
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think
these two options have their advantages and disadvantages. I state my opinion on the following points.

From the one side,
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travelling
with a
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companion
can bring
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many
benefits.
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First of all
,
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travelling
with a
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companion
is safer for several reasons.
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travellers
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lost in a strange city it is easier to find a way back. They can support and
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help
each
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other
if something happened and one of them
is hurt
. As for me, I prefer to
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travel
with a
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companion
if we
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travel
by car. I
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to be on a strange road by one's self. One more reason to have a
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companion
in a car is that they can
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change
each
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other
if one of them
is tired
. Second of all,
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travelling
with a
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companion
is more exciting and interesting. They can share all
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beautiful
moments and new experiences.
Finally
, it
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helps
to save
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some
money
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because
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companions
can share all expenses on gas, hotels, etc.

From the
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other
side,
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travelling
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alone
can bring
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benefits too.
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not
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does
not want to. If one
is tired
he
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not
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have to
go to a bar with his friend
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he
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him
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alone
.
Moreover
,
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sometimes
I
personally
want to be
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alone
and enjoy all beauty around me. I can relax and contemplate about my life sitting on a
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beautiful
cliff.

To sum up, I
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think
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travelling
with a
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companion
is better.
However
,
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sometimes
I prefer to be
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alone
by myself in a strange city. It gives me the feeling of adventure and I like that.
6Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
30Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
3Mistakes

IELTS essay Some people like to travel with a companion. Other people prefer to travel alone. Which one do you prefer? v. 3

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
294 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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