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Some people learn best when a classroom lesson is presented in an entertaining, enjoyable way. Other people learn best when a lesson is presented in a serious, formal way. Which of these two ways of learning do you prefer? Give reasons to support your ans v.2

Some people learn best when a classroom lesson is presented in an entertaining, enjoyable way. Other people learn best when a lesson is presented in a serious, formal way. Which of these two ways of learning do you prefer? Give reasons to support your ans v. 2
Learning and education are one of the basic needs in every community. People begin learning from young ages routinely. They may meet different teachers with different attitudes of teaching. Some of them believe that education classes must be definitely formal to discuss the issues better. However, a few instructors suggest that the atmosphere of the classes and students emotion and motivation should be considered too. I think the latter teachers’ advice is better due to many reasons which I am going to illustrate a number of them here. First, when a teacher teaches a lesson or a practical course formally, it may lose its influence in learners after a certain period. Furthermore, this era’s students need enough persuasion for learning anything. Sense of motivation is something that must be triggered in learners in order to create a little curiosity in them for better understanding. For example, my friend Sam hated chemistry strongly; he never showed any interest in this lesson. He always even mocked the chemistry classes and told that it is a useless issue. Surprisingly, when our teachers illustrated the application and funny experiments of chemistry, he loved to attend its classes ever since. Furthermore, I believe that humans and especially young adults learn anything better if it was presented along with some funny examples which made them thrilled. As I read somewhere in a scientific magazine, an expert said that people learn every matter dramatically better when they felt happy about it. Because, interest, joy and happiness stimulate some specific neurons in brain which, totally enhance the rate of learning in humans. Also, learning with creativity which certainly leads to students enjoy, would easily give instructors a freedom to use any helping tools to teach their course efficiently. When teachers feel that they are allowed to use any presentation means, they will feel the sense of obligation to teach their students far better. Students will also think that classes can be an enjoyable place too. Since, they face the applications of anything they have been taught. In conclusion, learning and education are serious issues which should be managed carefully. However, the methods used in them must create joy and happiness in students. They must be happy to have motivation and purpose in their life. This will never happen if they haven’t felt that before in some places like teaching classes.
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and education are one of the basic needs in every community.
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learning
from young ages
routinely
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meet
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different
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teachers
with
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different
attitudes of teaching.
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Some
of them believe that education
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classes
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must
be definitely formal to discuss the issues
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better
.
However
, a few instructors suggest that the atmosphere of the
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classes
and
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students
emotion and motivation should
be considered
too. I
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think
the latter
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teachers’
advice is
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better
due to
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many
reasons which I am going to illustrate a number of them here.

First
, when a
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teacher
teaches a lesson or a practical course
formally
, it may lose its influence in learners after a certain period.
Furthermore
, this era’s
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students
need
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enough
persuasion for
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learning
anything. Sense of motivation is something that
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must
be triggered
in learners in order to create a
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little
curiosity in them for
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better
understanding.
For example
, my friend Sam hated chemistry
strongly
; he never
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showed
any interest in this lesson. He always even mocked the chemistry
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classes
and
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told
that it is a useless issue.
Surprisingly
, when our
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teachers
illustrated the application and
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funny
experiments of chemistry, he
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loved
to attend its
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classes
ever since.

Furthermore
, I believe that humans and
especially
young adults learn anything
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better
if it
was presented
along with
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some
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funny
examples which made them thrilled. As I read somewhere in a scientific magazine, an expert said that
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people
learn every matter
dramatically
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better
when they felt happy about it.
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Because
, interest, joy and happiness stimulate
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some
specific neurons in brain which,
totally
enhance the rate of
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learning
in humans.

Also
,
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learning
with creativity which
certainly
leads to
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students
enjoy, would
easily
give instructors a freedom to
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use
any helping tools to teach their course
efficiently
. When
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teachers
feel that they are
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allowed
to
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use
any presentation means, they will feel the sense of obligation to teach their
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students
far
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better
.
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Students
will
also
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think
that
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classes
can be an enjoyable place too.
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Since
, they face the applications of anything they have
been taught
.

In conclusion
,
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learning
and education are serious issues which should
be managed
carefully
.
However
, the methods
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used
in them
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must
create joy and happiness in
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students
. They
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must
be happy to have motivation and purpose in their life. This will never happen if they haven’t felt that
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before
in
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some
places like teaching
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classes
.
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IELTS essay Some people learn best when a classroom lesson is presented in an entertaining, enjoyable way. Other people learn best when a lesson is presented in a serious, formal way. Which of these two ways of learning do you prefer? Give reasons to support your ans v. 2

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
392 words
6.5
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Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
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