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Some people find that following a strict routine allows them to feel more in control. Others, however, think that constant changes to the routine make life more interesting and less predictable. Discuss both views and give your opinion. Give reasons for you v.1

Some people find that following a strict routine allows them to feel more in control. Others, however, think that constant changes to the routine make life more interesting and less predictable. Give reasons for you v. 1
One of the biggest social and practical challenges that people living abroad face is the language barrier. I believe that this can lead to very serious social problems in many countries, but technology has made the practical issues less relevant over the last several decades. The main reason that having to speak a foreign language can cause social problems would be through the breakdown in understanding between people of different cultures. The most salient example of this is in the United States where there has been an influx of Hispanic immigrants, especially along the Southern border. These immigrants are typically able to integrate well if they learn English, but those that have not learned have provoked social problems and even violent reactions. Many English speaking residents resent the immigrants' failure to integrate and this has resulted in discriminatory practices and widespread racism towards Hispanics. This in turn has caused many Hispanics to develop an antipathy towards other residents and segregate themselves in homogeneous neighbourhoods. There are comparatively fewer practical problems caused by not knowing the language of the country where you live because of the development of technology in general and smartphones in particular. Computers have made it much easier to look up directions, find important information and get quick translations. Smartphones have made this even easier. If someone doesn’t know the language of the country where they live, they can still find restaurants to their liking on Facebook and get simple directions through Google Maps. They can even order food online without having to use another language at all. If they need to communicate with someone who does not speak their language they can simply take out their phone and use Google translate to slowly, but effectively, convey a message. The problems that not knowing the language of the country where you live causes are therefore minimal and easily overcome. In conclusion, I only partly agree with the statement in question. Not knowing a language when living abroad can cause social unrest, but pragmatic concerns have been mitigated by recent technology. In the future, it will become even less important to know the language of the country where you live, although there is great potential for increased social unrest and heightened tensions in many parts of the world.
One of the biggest
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people
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language
barrier. I believe that this can lead to
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very
serious
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social
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problems
in
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countries
,
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but
technology has made the practical issues less relevant over the last several decades.

The main reason that having to speak a foreign
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language
can cause
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social
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problems
would be through the breakdown in understanding between
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people
of
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different
cultures. The most salient example of this is in the United States where there has been an influx of Hispanic immigrants,
especially
along the Southern border. These immigrants are
typically
able to integrate well if they learn English,
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but
those that have not learned
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have
provoked
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social
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problems
and even violent reactions.
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English speaking
residents resent the immigrants' failure to integrate and this has resulted in discriminatory practices and widespread racism towards Hispanics. This in turn has caused
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many
Hispanics to develop an antipathy towards other residents and segregate themselves in homogeneous
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neighbourhoods
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There are
comparatively
fewer practical
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problems
caused by not knowing the
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language
of the
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country
where you
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live
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because
of the development of technology
in general
and smartphones
in particular
. Computers have made it much easier to look up directions, find
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important
information and
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get
quick translations. Smartphones have made this even easier. If someone doesn’t know the
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language
of the
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country
where they
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live
, they can
still
find restaurants to their liking on Facebook and
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get
simple directions through Google Maps. They can even order food online without having to
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use
another
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language
at all. If they need to communicate with someone who does not speak their
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language
they can
simply
take out their phone and
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use
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Google translate
to
slowly
,
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but
effectively
, convey a message. The
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problems
that not knowing the
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language
of the
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country
where you
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live
causes are
therefore
minimal and
easily
overcome.

In conclusion
, I
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only
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agree
with the statement in question. Not knowing a
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language
when living abroad can cause
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social
unrest,
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but
pragmatic concerns have
been mitigated
by recent technology. In the future, it will become even less
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important
to know the
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language
of the
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country
where you
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live
, although there is great potential for increased
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social
unrest and heightened tensions in
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many
parts of the world.
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Learning another language is not only learning different words for the same things, but learning another way to think about things.
Flora Lewis

IELTS essay Some people find that following a strict routine allows them to feel more in control. Others, however, think that constant changes to the routine make life more interesting and less predictable. Give reasons for you v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
379 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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