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People believe that being literate in English allows you to acquire better jobs and thus allows one to have access to a better standard of living. Up to what extent do you agree or disagree with the statement? v.1

People believe that being literate in English allows you to acquire better jobs and thus allows one to have access to a better standard of living. Up with the statement? v. 1
These days, more and more people are learning the English language. It is opined that proficiency in the English language improves employment opportunities thereby permitting to an elevated lifestyle. I want to express my overall disagreement. English is a medium of communication. It is certainly true that communication means the exchange of information, ideas and thoughts but it can happen in any language, not just English. Knowledge of English alone cannot determine the type of jobs. A person is considered to be employable only when he has the necessary qualification, experience and learning attitude. For example, in spite of having Mandarin as an official language, the Chinese economy did very well in the last two decades. It is a multi-yen economy and global hub of manufacturing. Given the aforementioned, mere knowledge of the English language does not guarantee a better lifestyle. Lifestyle is a way or a style of living and not just about the salary or perks. There are numerous examples around us. For example, Mr Kapil Sharma, a stand-up comedian. His English language skills are not good but he is one of the best stand-up comedians of our times living an affluent lifestyle. To summarize, the English language is just a way to express your thoughts and ideas. Better job and hence lifestyle has nothing to do with knowledge of the English language. I believe that if you know the English language or any other language, you can express your views in your voice rather than the interpreter's voice. It is one' skills and subject knowledge which leads to better career opportunities and hence improves the way in which a person lives.
These days, more and more
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people
are learning the English
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language
. It
is opined
that proficiency in the English
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language
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improves
employment opportunities thereby permitting to an elevated
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
lifestyle
. I want to express my
overall
disagreement.

English is a medium of communication. It is
certainly
true that communication means the exchange of information,
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ideas
and thoughts
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but
it can happen in any
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language
, not
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just
English.
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Knowledge
of English alone cannot determine the type of jobs. A person
is considered
to be employable
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only
when he has the necessary qualification, experience and learning attitude.
For example
,
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in spite of
having Mandarin as an official
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language
, the Chinese economy did
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very
well in the last two decades. It is a multi-yen economy and global hub of manufacturing.

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Given
the aforementioned, mere
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knowledge
of the English
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language
does not guarantee a better
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lifestyle
.
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Lifestyle
is a way or a style of living and not
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just
about the salary or perks. There are numerous examples around us.
For example
, Mr
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Kapil
Sharma, a stand-up comedian. His English
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language
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skills
are not
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good
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but
he is one of the best stand-up comedians of our times living an affluent lifestyle.

To summarize
, the English
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language
is
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just
a way to express your thoughts and
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ideas
. Better job and
hence
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lifestyle
has nothing to do with
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knowledge
of the English
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language
. I believe that if you know the English
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language
or any other
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language
, you can express your views in your voice
rather
than the interpreter's voice. It is one'
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skills
and subject
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knowledge
which leads to better career opportunities and
hence
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improves
the way in which a person
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lives
.
7Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
18Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
2Mistakes
If we spoke a different language, we would perceive a somewhat different world.
Ludwig Wittgenstein

IELTS essay People believe that being literate in English allows you to acquire better jobs and thus allows one to have access to a better standard of living. Up with the statement? v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
274 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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