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Some people feel that petrol cars should be banned. Others feel that we should be allowed to drive petrol cars. Discuss both sides and give your opinion. v.2

Some people feel that petrol cars should be banned. Others feel that we should be allowed to drive petrol cars. v. 2
A lot of people believe that in order for us to stop global warming, we need to ban all products that have any form of carbon emission, which unfortunately petrol cars are one of those products. In this essay I will discuss why I don't think petrol cars should be banned. Yes, I agree that we need to fight global warming and make the earth greener, but we can't do this overnight. We need a more subtle approach to transition into electric cars. If we ban gasoline cars, this would cause a lot of hardship in the economy. For example, a logistics company that manages a fleet of vehicles would find it difficult to cope with such cruel regulation. This decision could even drive such company out of business for good. This would be catastrophic for families who relied on that business to make ends meet. On the other hand, if we ban gasoline cars we would be able to end carbon emission a lot faster than previously anticipated. Our cars would be more efficient and earth friendly. New opportunities would be created and the world would start leaning towards an alternative source of energy. Tesla for instance, is one of the leading manufacturer of electric cars. In their recent reports, they have been able to achieve a higher miles per gallon than any fuel or diesel car ever made. In conclusion, banning cars that uses fuel has a strong negative impact on the economy and also a positive effect on our environment. But in order for us to continue to function and not plunge into a great depression for the sake of making the earth green, we should create laws that would help us to slowly transition from this conventional car into electric ones instead.
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A lot of
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people
believe that in order for us to
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stop
global warming, we need to ban all products that have any form of carbon emission, which unfortunately petrol
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cars
are one of those products. In this essay I will discuss why I don't
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think
petrol
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cars
should
be banned
.

Yes, I
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agree
that we need to fight global warming and
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make
the earth greener,
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but
we can't do this overnight. We need a more subtle approach to transition into electric
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cars
. If we ban gasoline
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cars
, this would cause
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a lot of
hardship in the economy.
For example
, a logistics
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
company
that manages a fleet of vehicles would find it difficult to cope with such cruel regulation. This decision could even drive such
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
company
out of business for
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
good
. This would be catastrophic for families who relied on that business to
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make
ends
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meet
.

On the other hand
, if we ban gasoline
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cars
we would be able to
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end
carbon emission a lot faster than previously anticipated. Our
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cars
would be more efficient and earth friendly. New opportunities would
be created
and the world would
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start
leaning towards an alternative source of energy. Tesla
for instance
, is one of the leading manufacturer of electric
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
cars
. In their recent reports, they have been able to achieve a higher miles per gallon than any fuel or diesel
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car
ever made.

In conclusion
, banning
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cars
that
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uses
fuel has a strong
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negative
impact on the economy and
also
a
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positive
effect on our environment.
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But
in order for us to continue to function and not plunge into a great depression for the sake of making the earth green, we should create laws that would
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help
us to
slowly
transition from this conventional
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car
into electric ones
instead
.
8.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
8.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
8.5Mistakes

IELTS essay Some people feel that petrol cars should be banned. Others feel that we should be allowed to drive petrol cars. v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
296 words
8.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 8.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 8.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 8.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 8.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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