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Some people feel that manufacturers and supermarkets have the responsibility to reduce the amount of packaging of goods. Others argue that customers should avoid buying goods with a lot of packaging. Discuss both views and give your opinion. v.1

Some people feel that manufacturers and supermarkets have the responsibility to reduce the amount of packaging of goods. Others argue that customers should avoid buying goods with a lot of packaging. v. 1
Some people think that it is the responsibility of producer to reduce the packaging or the product and this can have a negative effect on the environment. This essay will analyse both sides of the argument. On the one hand. I believe that the company have to reduce the amount of plastic bag to package the products. The buyer also have very little awareness about the negative impacts that packaging have and the costumers do not have much knowledge about the packaging using in the product so it is very difficult for them to attack. Moreover, the producers and manufacturers can also rude the plastic bag in the process and instead of using the biodegradable packaging they can use the paper and tote bag to package them. In some brand use some activities to raise awareness like discount for the products. For example, Highland coffee and supermarkets must be a great way to discount buyers' prices if they buy their own packaging to take the products. Take milk bottles, for example. If supermarkets made them thinner or even replaced them with carton bottles, they would have a tremendous impact on the amount of plastic consumed. Thus, the argument that supermarkets should take the responsibility to reduce over packaging certainly makes sense On the other hand, individuals also have responsibilities to protect the environment. They can use the biodegradable packing like paper or bamboo straws to save the money and terrestrial animal. For example, when they go shopping, they can use tote bag to carry goods instead of plastic bag. The government should set higher prices for plastic bags to encourage people to use recycled cloth bags. For example, a senior citizen in the city of Bangalore in India took the initiative to stop using plastic products by educating his family members first, then friends and neighbours. To conclude, although the plastic packaging is really cheap and convenient, but it also has some disadvantage in using, everyone needs to reduce that figure of packaging.
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effect on the environment. This essay will
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both sides of the argument.

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company
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the amount of
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plastic
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to package the
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. The buyer
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awareness about the
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impacts that
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have and the costumers do not have much knowledge about the
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using in the
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product
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it is
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difficult for them to attack.
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in the process and
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they can
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the paper and tote
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to package them. In
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brand
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activities to raise awareness like discount for the
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products
. For
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example
, Highland coffee and supermarkets
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be a great way to discount buyers' prices if they
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buy
their
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packaging
to take the
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products
. Take milk bottles, for
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example
. If supermarkets made them thinner or even replaced them with carton bottles, they would have a tremendous impact on the amount of
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plastic
consumed.
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, the argument that supermarkets should take the responsibility to
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over
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packaging
certainly
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makes
sense

On the other hand
, individuals
also
have responsibilities to protect the environment. They can
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use
the biodegradable packing like paper or bamboo straws to save the money and terrestrial animal. For
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example
, when they go shopping, they can
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tote
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bag
to carry
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instead
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plastic
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. The
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government
should set higher prices for
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plastic
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bags
to encourage
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people
to
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recycled cloth
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bags
. For
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example
, a senior citizen in the city of Bangalore in India took the initiative to
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stop
using
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plastic
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by educating his family members
first
, then friends and
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neighbours
.

To conclude
, although the
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is
really
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cheap
and convenient,
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it
also
has
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disadvantage in using, everyone needs to
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reduce
that figure of
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.
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36Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay Some people feel that manufacturers and supermarkets have the responsibility to reduce the amount of packaging of goods. Others argue that customers should avoid buying goods with a lot of packaging. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
333 words
6.5
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