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Nowadays, traffic is becoming a global issue. What are its causes and effects? How can it be controlled? v.1

Nowadays, traffic is becoming a global issue. What are its causes and effects? How can it be controlled? v. 1
Owing to increased number of cars, road traffic has become an international problem. It has multiple causes and has resulted in a surge of air pollution. There are several ways to control it like improving public transport. The ever increasing figure of vehicles on roads has been responsible for the traffic problems. The reason behind this may be easy affordability by the general public. The leasing of cars by several banks and easy instalments' have convinced people to purchase the cars. Previously, they could not afford to but these vehicles as they could not make full payment. Now a small amount is deducted from the salary and a lot of low income group manages to own their personal cars. The working couples may be another reason for the increase transport congestion. Previously, there used to be a single family car which was owned by family head or father and everyone used to use it but now with the increase in working couples both of them need their own cars to go to the office. The traffic congestion is responsible for ever increasing air pollution. The exhaust from cars produces carbon dioxide and from old car's carbon monoxide, which is responsible for global warming. This has become an emergency throughout the world as the release of a large amount of greenhouse gases has resulted in damage to ozone layer which protects us against the ultraviolet radiations which are harmful. These gases have resulted in acid rain in certain areas of the earth, hence destroying the forests and trees. The transport congestion can be controlled in several ways, but the most important is improving public transport. If the government introduces and improves the public transport like metro, trams and make them available to the general public, people would use these rather than cars. The reduction in number of cars on roads would mean reduced emission of harmful gases and consequently decreased air pollution. Another solution might be a restriction on the number of cars that a family can own. For instance, nowadays everyone in the family, owns his own vehicle, but a minimum number should be implemented to reduce the tendency of purchasing cars. In conclusion, road traffic contributing to air pollution is burning issue in todays world and the world powers should join hands in collaboration in order to have an effective control on it.
Owing to increased
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number
of
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cars
,
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road
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traffic
has become an international problem. It has multiple causes and has resulted in a surge of
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air
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pollution
. There are several ways to control it like improving
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public
transport.

The
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ever increasing
figure of vehicles on
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roads
has been responsible for the
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traffic
problems. The reason behind this may be easy affordability by the general
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public
.
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The
leasing of
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cars
by several banks and easy
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instalments
' have convinced
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people
to
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purchase
the
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cars
. Previously, they could not afford to
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but
these vehicles as they could not
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make
full payment.
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Now
a
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small
amount
is deducted
from the salary and
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a lot of
low income group manages to
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own
their personal
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cars
. The working couples may be another reason for the increase
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transport
congestion. Previously, there
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used
to be a single
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family
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car
which was
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owned
by
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family
head or father and everyone
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used
to
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use
it
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but
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now
with the increase in working couples both of them need their
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own
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cars
to go to the office.

The
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traffic
congestion is responsible for
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ever increasing
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air
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pollution
. The exhaust from
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cars
produces carbon dioxide and from
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old
car's carbon monoxide, which is responsible for global warming. This has become an emergency throughout the world as the release of a large amount of greenhouse gases has resulted in damage to ozone layer which protects us against the ultraviolet radiations which are harmful. These gases have resulted in acid rain in certain areas of the earth,
hence
destroying the forests and trees.

The
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transport
congestion can
be controlled
in several ways,
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but
the most
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important
is improving
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public
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transport
. If the
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government
introduces and
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improves
the
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public
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transport
like metro, trams and
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make
them available to the general
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public
,
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people
would
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use
these
rather
than
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cars
. The reduction in
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number
of
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cars
on
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roads
would mean
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reduced
emission of harmful gases and
consequently
decreased
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air
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pollution
. Another solution might be a restriction on the
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number
of
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cars
that a
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family
can
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own
.
For instance
, nowadays everyone in the
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family
,
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owns
his
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own
vehicle,
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but
a minimum
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number
should
be implemented
to
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reduce
the tendency of purchasing cars.

In conclusion
,
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road
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traffic
contributing to
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air
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pollution
is burning issue in
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todays
world and the world powers should
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join
hands in collaboration in order to have an effective control on it.
5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
43Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7Mistakes

IELTS essay Nowadays, traffic is becoming a global issue. What are its causes and effects? How can it be controlled? v. 1

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
394 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
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Lexical Resource: 5.0
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Grammatical Range: 6.5
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