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Some people feel that education should be provided exclusively by the state and private education should be prohibited. To what extent do you agree or disagree? v.5

Some people feel that education should be provided exclusively by the state and private education should be prohibited. v. 5
Education is crucial for the comprehensive development of humanity. In most countries, both private and public educational institutes are present. Some people believe that the government should be the sole provider of formal learning in a country. I disagree with this notion. It would be an extra burden on the financial budget of a country. Thus, private and state-run educational institutes are equally essential in a society. When educational institutions are managed by the state, every student will be able to access them. This is because these institutions provide education for free or at concessional rates. In India, for instance, the centre runs schools and colleges nationwide. Students who are below the poverty line can study at these institutions without paying any charges. The fee imposed on other students is also nominal compared to the amount charged by private institutions. Obviously, there are several benefits when governments run educational centres. However, the government cannot be the exclusive provider of the formal education. The administration has numerous other responsibilities as well. In addition, there is a limit on budgetary expenses for administration to invest in education. That is why it is important to grant private sector investment in education. Naturally, these institutions are unlikely to deliver free education. However, they still provide standard education and students who can afford to bear the expenditure can enrol in these institutions. If everyone contemplates to go to public schools, it could reduce the quality of education because of the inadequacy of the resources. Moreover, when private schools operate in a state, the competition among them will indirectly improve the level of education. In conclusion, private education is not free, but it is necessary to allow private companies to operate educational academies because the authorities alone cannot provide education to all the students in a country. Furthermore, the presence of educational centres in a country will increase the status of teaching because of the competition between them.
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Education
is crucial for the comprehensive development of humanity. In most
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countries
, both
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private
and public
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educational
institutes are present.
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Some
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people
believe that the
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government
should be the sole provider of formal learning in a
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country
. I disagree with this notion. It would be an extra burden on the financial budget of a
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country
.
Thus
,
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private
and state-run
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educational
institutes are
equally
essential in a society.

When
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educational
institutions
are managed
by the state, every
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student
will be able to access them. This is
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because
these institutions provide
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education
for free or at concessional rates. In India,
for instance
, the
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centre
runs schools and colleges nationwide.
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Students
who are below the poverty line can study at these institutions without paying any charges. The fee imposed on other
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students
is
also
nominal compared to the amount charged by
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private
institutions.
Obviously
, there are several benefits when
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governments
run
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educational
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centres
.

However
, the
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government
cannot be the exclusive provider of the formal
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education
. The administration has numerous other responsibilities
as well
.
In addition
, there is a limit on budgetary expenses for administration to invest in
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education
.
That is
why it is
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important
to grant
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private
sector investment in
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education
.
Naturally
, these institutions are unlikely to deliver free
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education
.
However
, they
still
provide standard
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education
and
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students
who can afford to bear the expenditure can enrol in these institutions. If everyone contemplates to go to public schools, it could
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reduce
the quality of
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education
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because
of the inadequacy of the resources.
Moreover
, when
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private
schools operate in a state, the competition among them will
indirectly
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improve
the level of education.

In conclusion
,
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private
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education
is not free,
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but
it is necessary to
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allow
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private
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companies
to operate
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educational
academies
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because
the authorities alone cannot provide
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education
to all the
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students
in a
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country
.
Furthermore
, the presence of
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educational
Possible spelling mistake. 'centres' is British English.
centres
in a
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country
will increase the status of teaching
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because
of the competition between them.
8Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
8Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
8Mistakes

IELTS essay Some people feel that education should be provided exclusively by the state and private education should be prohibited. v. 5

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
322 words
8
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0
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