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Some people feel that education should be provided exclusively by the state and private education should be prohibited. To what extent do you agree or disagree? v.1

Some people feel that education should be provided exclusively by the state and private education should be prohibited. v. 1
Education is crucial for the overall development of humanity. In most countries, both private and public institutions provide education. Some people believe that the government should be the only provider of education in a country. I completely disagree with this statement. This essay will discuss the importance of having both private and government educational institutes. When educational institutions are run by the government, every student will be able to access them. That is because government institutions provide education for free or at concessional rates. In India, for example, the government runs schools and colleges all over the country. Students who are below the poverty line can study at these institutions without paying any fee. The fee charged from other students is also nominal compared to the fee charged by private institutions. Obviously, there are several benefits when governments run educational institutes. However, the government cannot be the exclusive provider of education. The government has numerous other responsibilities as well. Also, there is a limit to the amount of money the government can invest in education. That is why it is important to allow private companies also to provide education. Of course, these institutions are unlikely to provide free education. However, they still provide quality education and students who can afford to pay the fee can enroll in these institutions. In a way, these institutions also take some load off government institutions. If everyone had to go to government schools, it would reduce the quality of education because of the inadequacy of resources. Also, when private schools operate in a country, the competition among them will indirectly improve the quality of education. In conclusion, private education is not free but it is important to allow private companies to run educational institutes because the government alone cannot provide education to all the students in the country. Also, the presence of private educational institutes in the country will increase the quality of education because of the competition between them.
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is crucial for the
overall
development of humanity. In most
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countries
, both
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private
and public institutions
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provide
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education
.
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people
believe that the
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government
should be the
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only
provider of
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education
in a
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country
. I completely disagree with this statement. This essay will discuss the importance of having both
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private
and
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government
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educational
institutes.

When
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educational
institutions are
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run
by the
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government
, every
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student
will be able to access them.
That is
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because
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government
institutions
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provide
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education
for free or at concessional rates. In India,
for example
, the
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government
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runs
schools and colleges all over the
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country
.
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Students
who are below the poverty line can study at these institutions without paying any
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fee
. The
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fee
charged from other
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students
is
also
nominal compared to the
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fee
charged by
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private
institutions.
Obviously
, there are several benefits when
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governments
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run
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educational
institutes.

However
, the
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government
cannot be the exclusive provider of
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education
. The
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government
has numerous other responsibilities
as well
.
Also
, there is a limit to the amount of money the
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government
can invest in
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education
.
That is
why it is
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important
to
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allow
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private
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companies
also
to
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provide
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education
.
Of course
, these institutions are unlikely to
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provide
free
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education
.
However
, they
still
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provide
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quality
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education
and
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students
who can afford to pay the
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fee
can enroll in these institutions. In a way, these institutions
also
take
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some
load off
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government
institutions. If everyone had to go to
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government
schools, it would
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reduce
the
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quality
of
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education
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because
of the inadequacy of resources.
Also
, when
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private
schools operate in a
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country
, the competition among them will
indirectly
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improve
the
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quality
of education.

In conclusion
,
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private
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education
is not free
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it is
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to
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allow
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private
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companies
to
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run
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educational
institutes
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because
the
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government
alone cannot
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provide
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education
to all the
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students
in the
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country
.
Also
, the presence of
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private
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educational
institutes in the
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country
will increase the
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quality
of
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education
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because
of the competition between them.
16Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
67Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay Some people feel that education should be provided exclusively by the state and private education should be prohibited. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
326 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
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