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Some people feel that children should be educated in single sex schools; others argue that mixed schools are better. Discuss both views and give your opinion. v.2

Some people feel that children should be educated in single sex schools; others argue that mixed schools are better. v. 2
The current educational institutes are offering different accommodation facilities, mainly based on sexuality. Some prefer studying in single sexuality oriented institute while some prefer going to schools which have mixed sex teaching facilities. This essay will argue the contradictory viewpoint between people based on which mode of studying facilities should children opt. Firstly, a certain amount of the population feels that children should be sent to academy which only promote a single sexuality. They firmly believe that this facility will help them to reduce the growing amount of love relationships between students and they also lose their focus on their studies. For instance, 60% of students who study in co- education have affairs and it has been proved that these people scored less compared to people who are single. Hence, children studying in this schools can avoid having affairs and also can focus on studies. On the other hand, some of them argue that children should be sent to co-education schools rather than single sex schools. The main reason behind their thought process is because this type of schools will promote children to be open minded rather than being a broad minded with respect to gender. To illustrate this, people who had a background of studying in co-education get along with opposite sexuality well while other people find it to be difficult. Therefore, studying in mixed sex institute will helps them to get long well with one another and also in addition avoids them to think in a broad way. So, what kind of a academy should children be sent? Well, although the single sex institutesex institute reduces the rate of students to fall in love, but this idea will develop kids to be anti towards their opposite gender. Whereas, co-education schools will reduce the gender differences and in addition it helps children to be comfortable with the opposite sexuality. To conclude, I personally feel it is essential for every kid to study in mixed institute as these schools outweigh single sex schools in many different positive ways.
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different
accommodation facilities,
mainly
based on
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sexuality
.
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prefer
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studying
in
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single
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sexuality
oriented institute while
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some
prefer going to
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schools
which have mixed
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sex
teaching facilities. This essay will argue the contradictory viewpoint between
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people
based on which mode of
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studying
facilities should
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children
opt.

Firstly
, a certain amount of the population feels that
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children
should be
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sent
to academy which
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only
promote a
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single
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sexuality
. They
firmly
believe that this facility will
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help
them to
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reduce
the growing amount of
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love
relationships between
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students and
they
also
lose their focus on their studies.
For instance
, 60% of students who study in co- education have affairs and it has
been proved
that these
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people
scored less compared to
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people
who are
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single
.
Hence
,
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children
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studying
in
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this
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schools
can avoid having affairs and
also
can focus on studies.

On the other hand
,
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some
of them argue that
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children
should be
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sent
to co-education
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schools
rather
than
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single
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sex
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schools
. The main reason behind their
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thought
process is
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because
this type of
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schools
will promote
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children
to be
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open minded
rather
than being a
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broad minded
with respect to gender. To illustrate this,
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people
who had a background of
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studying
in co-education
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get
along with opposite
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sexuality
well while other
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people
find it to be difficult.
Therefore
,
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studying
in mixed
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sex
institute will
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helps
them to
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get
long well with one another and
also
in addition
avoids them to
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think
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in a broad way
.

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, what
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kind of a
academy should
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children
be
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sent
? Well, although the
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single
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sex
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institutesex
institute
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reduces
the rate of students to fall in
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love
,
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but
this
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idea
will develop kids to be anti towards their opposite gender. Whereas, co-education
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schools
will
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reduce
the gender differences and
in addition
it
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helps
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children
to be comfortable with the opposite
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sexuality
.
To conclude
, I
personally
feel it is essential for every kid to study in mixed institute as these
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schools
outweigh
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single
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sex
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schools
in
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many
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different
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positive
ways.
16Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
41Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
8Mistakes
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IELTS essay Some people feel that children should be educated in single sex schools; others argue that mixed schools are better. v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
338 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
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  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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