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In many parts of the world girls and boys are educated together in co-educational or mixed schools. Some people think that girls and boys benefit from being educated separately in single-sex schools. To what extent do you agree or disagree? v.1

In many parts of the world girls and boys are educated together in co-educational or mixed schools. Some people think that girls and boys benefit from being educated separately in single-sex schools. v. 1
Throughout the time, buildings are eroded and toward to dangerous conditions, therefore many people think that is better demolish it. However, others prove that debilitated constructions have the highest historical value. Since many constructions were built in the past or more earlier century, thereby presently they are eroded and live or walk near such buildings is dangerous. Therefore, the government and people have been increasing spending on keeping old constructions in proper conditions. However, no matter what they are doing the sewerage system, inside infrastructure and the walls slowly disintegrate that lead to more difficult life for residents. Moreover, many old structures are abandoned, therefore attracting homeless or drug addicts. Thus, all previous factors push people think that better knocked down ancient buildings. However, many antique constructions have monumental value because are keeping a memory about the ancient time or famous people from the past, thereby was rebuilt to a museum. Moreover, many such buildings without any changes are attracting many people. For example, ruins town of Caesaria in Israel, or Nesebar of Bulgaria. Therefore, the government in some specific situation has benefits when enhances old construction or encourage archaeologists for digging. For example, the case in Poland there cities have an old town centre there make many events and celebrates. To conclude, society today has an ambiguous choice keep or demolish, and many factors push them on both sides. However, people cannot decline one fact that all old buildings eventually will disintegrate, therefore perhaps more rational do it today and preserve money for something other that more important. Moreover, the technology is changing rapidly, thereby scientist probably figure out some software that allowed demonstrates antique constructions in 3D. Besides, modern house with purpose accommodation more comfortable and provides more facilities for citizens that more important in a tendency is growing population.
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and toward to
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dangerous
conditions,
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therefore
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many
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people
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think
that is
better demolish it.
However
, others prove that debilitated
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constructions
have the highest historical value.

Since
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many
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constructions
were built
in the past or
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more earlier
century, thereby
presently
they
are eroded
and
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live
or walk near such
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buildings
is
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dangerous
.
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Therefore
, the
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government
and
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people
have been increasing spending on keeping
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old
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constructions
in proper conditions.
However
, no matter what they are doing the sewerage system, inside infrastructure and the walls
slowly
disintegrate that lead to more difficult life for residents.
Moreover
,
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many
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old
structures
are abandoned
,
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therefore
attracting homeless or drug addicts.
Thus
, all previous factors push
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people
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think
that better knocked down ancient buildings.

However
,
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many
antique
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constructions
have monumental value
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because
are keeping a memory about the ancient time or
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famous
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people
from the past, thereby was rebuilt to a museum.
Moreover
,
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many
such
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buildings
without any
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changes
are attracting
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many
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people
.
For example
, ruins town of
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Caesaria
in Israel, or
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Nesebar
of Bulgaria.
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Therefore
, the
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government
in
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some
specific situation has benefits when enhances
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old
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construction
or encourage archaeologists for digging.
For example
, the case in Poland there cities have an
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old
town
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centre
there
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make
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many
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events
and celebrates.

To conclude
, society
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today
has an ambiguous choice
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keep
or demolish, and
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many
factors push them on both sides.
However
,
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people
cannot decline one fact that all
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old
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buildings
eventually
will disintegrate,
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therefore
perhaps more rational do it
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today
and preserve money for something other that more
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important
.
Moreover
, the technology is changing
rapidly
, thereby scientist
probably
figure out
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some
software that
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allowed
demonstrates antique
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constructions
in 3D.
Besides
, modern
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house
with purpose accommodation more comfortable and provides more facilities for citizens that more
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important
in a tendency is growing population.
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7Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay In many parts of the world girls and boys are educated together in co-educational or mixed schools. Some people think that girls and boys benefit from being educated separately in single-sex schools. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
302 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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