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Some people fear that technology is gradually taking over control of our lives, while others think that it has led to many positive developments in all aspects of our lives. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion v.1

Some people fear that technology is gradually taking over control of our lives, while others think that it has led to many positive developments in all aspects of our lives. 1
Some would argue that humans, these days, are being controlled by technology, while others say that advancements in technology has greatly benefited humankind. Although recent developments in science and technology has adversely affected the employment rate, I believe it has helped people form new acquaintances. On the one hand, incorporation of electronic equipment, be it robots or advanced machinery, have severely impacted the job vacancies. Having got the state of the art production or testing machines the need to have manual operations- unlike the past- is becoming redundant practice. As a result, many job aspirants- despite having potential skills- are left unemployed and existing jobs are also jeopardised. This automation can usher in continuous production without halting, barring occasional services, has provided an opportunity to employees to make their workplace automated- replacing the workforce by machines. The layoff 2000 employees at Maruti Suzuki's production plant in Gurugram by the introduction of robots bears testimony to this. On the other hand, modern gadgets are assisting people to strengthen their family bonds and form new ones. These gizmos help to contact not only their immediate family members, but also to become friends with new people. The Internet, for instance, has transformed the whole world into a global village and individuals and now are exploring new people and broadening the horizons of knowledge about the culture of other people. This transformation has eradicated the previously existed biases on the basis of caste or religion making countries multicultural. In conclusion, while modern technology breakthroughs handmade many people jobless and threatened the existing jobs, it is certain that these developments are assisting people to socialize.
Some
would argue that humans, these days, are
being controlled
by
technology
, while others say that advancements in
technology
has
greatly
benefited humankind. Although recent developments in science and
technology
has
adversely
affected
the employment rate, I believe it has
helped
people
form
new
acquaintances.

On the one hand, incorporation of electronic equipment, be it robots or advanced machinery, have
severely
impacted the
job
vacancies. Having
got
the
state of the art
production or testing machines the need to have manual operations- unlike the past- is becoming redundant practice.
As a result
,
many
job
aspirants- despite having potential
skills
- are
left
unemployed and existing
jobs
are
also
jeopardised
. This automation can usher in continuous production without halting, barring occasional services, has provided an opportunity to employees to
make
their workplace automated- replacing the workforce by machines. The layoff 2000 employees at
Maruti
Suzuki's production plant in
Gurugram
by the introduction of robots bears testimony to this.

On the other hand
, modern gadgets are assisting
people
to strengthen their family bonds and form
new
ones. These gizmos
help
to contact not
only
their immediate family members,
but
also
to become friends with
new
people
. The Internet,
for instance
, has transformed the whole world into a global village and individuals and
now
are exploring
new
people
and broadening the horizons of knowledge about the culture of other
people
. This transformation has eradicated the previously existed biases on the basis of caste or religion making countries multicultural.

In conclusion
, while modern
technology
breakthroughs handmade
many
people
jobless and threatened the existing
jobs
, it is certain that these developments are assisting
people
to socialize.
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IELTS essay Some people fear that technology is gradually taking over control of our lives, while others think that it has led to many positive developments in all aspects of our lives. 1

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270 words
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