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Some people consider thinking about and planning for the future to be a waste of time. They argue that people should simply live in the moment. Do you agree or disagree? Use at least one personal example in your response. v.2

Some people consider thinking about and planning for the future to be a waste of time. They argue that people should simply live in the moment. Use at least one personal example in your response. v. 2
There is a belief that to be present-oriented is better than making plans for tomorrow, which is thought to be a meaningless way to spend the time. I partially agree with this statement and believe that both focusing on the present moment and planning for the future are equally important in our lives. On the one hand, creating a plan helps us to reach our goals and fulfil our dreams. Furthermore, having a clear vision together with effective guidelines enable people to become successful in the path they choose. For example, Steve Jobs, a prominent salesman and leader, had a habit to plan several years ahead. As a result, his plans were put into action brought success to him and the company he worked with. On the other hand, thoughts about the future might involve the feelings of anxiety and stress, especially if the future plans become destroyed unexpectedly. Concentrating on the present moment might, on the contrary, help to release the tension and find new options. Let me illustrate my view by a personal example. When I travelled to Europe the last time, I took a wrong train and did not reach my destination on time. Nevertheless, I focused on the positive sides and thought of my current resources and opportunities. Eventually, I managed to figure out the best solution out of my predicament and how to continue my trip. To summarize, the future has an impact on our lives as well as the present. Therefore, the opinion that the current moment has greater importance than the upcoming days is one-sided and is not completely supported in my essay. Overall, it is very important to build steps towards our imminent success by planning effectively. Simultaneously, tomorrow is unpredictable and there is no guarantee that life will go according to the plan. Therefore, we should cherish the present day and look for the chances it has in store for us.
There is a belief that to be present-oriented is better than making
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plans
for tomorrow, which is
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thought
to be a meaningless way to spend the time. I
partially
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agree
with this statement and believe that both focusing on the
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present
moment and planning for the
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future
are
equally
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important
in our
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lives
.

On the one hand, creating a
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
plan
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
helps
us to reach our goals and fulfil our dreams.
Furthermore
, having a
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
clear
vision together with effective guidelines enable
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
to become successful in the path they choose.
For example
, Steve Jobs, a prominent salesman and leader, had a habit to
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plan
several years ahead.
As a result
, his
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plans
were put
into action brought success to him and the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
company
he worked with.

On the other hand
, thoughts about the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
future
might involve the feelings of anxiety and
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
stress
,
especially
if the
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future
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plans
become
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destroyed
unexpectedly
. Concentrating on the
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present
moment might,
on the contrary
,
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
help
to release the tension and find new options.
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Let
me illustrate my view by a personal example. When I travelled to Europe the last time, I took a
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
wrong
train and did not reach my destination on time.
Nevertheless
, I focused on the
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
positive
sides and
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
thought
of my
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
current
resources and opportunities.
Eventually
, I managed to figure out the best solution out of my predicament and how to continue my trip.

To summarize
, the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
future
has an impact on our
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
lives
as well
as the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
present
.
Therefore
, the opinion that the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
current
moment has greater importance than the upcoming days is one-sided and is not completely supported in my essay.
Overall
, it is
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very
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important
to build steps towards our imminent success by planning
effectively
.
Simultaneously
, tomorrow is unpredictable and there is no guarantee that life will go according to the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
plan
.
Therefore
, we should cherish the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
present
day and look for the chances it has in store for us.
8Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
8Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
8Mistakes
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IELTS essay Some people consider thinking about and planning for the future to be a waste of time. They argue that people should simply live in the moment. Use at least one personal example in your response. v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
320 words
8
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 8.0
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 8.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 8.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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