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Some people consider sport to be their career and role in the society. For others, it is mostly a workout to keep them fit. v.1

Some people consider sport to be their career and role in the society. For others, it is mostly a workout to keep them fit. v. 1
Several sports personalities have brought fame and pride to their country, and some have been successful for considering that as a personal pursuit. Some people are convinced that sports have a significant role and purpose in uplifting the pride of a country. However, others refute that the essence of sports is to make certain people become physically fit. We must acknowledge the belief of others that sports have important roles in showing the talent of the different individuals. The sports have signified that a country has the ability to display their unique abilities and strengths to other such as boxing, basketball, swimming and other strenuous sports. The sports have seen as an enormous lure which has created impacts and suspense for the sport's proponents. It has made the country’s tension at ease whenever there is an Olympic match or national sports completion. For instance, whenever there is an international boxing competition between the Philippines and other countries, the attention of the supporters are diverted on the fights of their country. The international and national sports events often erase the tension and distance between nations and tribes and offer an excellent opportunity to bring people together. For instance, India and Pakistan have their own political issues but their friendship remains constant in the case of cricket sport. Not everyone can become professional sports personnel and for them, the sport is a great way of doing the physical exercise and remaining fit. Almost every outdoor sport requires a great deal of physical movement and it can be a great alternative of doing cumbersome exercises. It is proven that people who start doing exercises in a gym often stop doing so because of time constraint or lack of interests. But people who get involved in sports often continue this habit for a long time because of their passion for the game. In conclusion, people who are good at a sport take it as their career and consider it to be a good role for the others. This is to some extent is a good way of perusing a career and inspiring others. On the contrary, many others take sports activity as part of their daily exercises and do not take it as their career either because they are not optimistic about the future of the sports profession or not good enough to be a renowned sports person.
Several
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sports
personalities have brought fame and pride to their
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country
, and
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some
have been successful for considering that as a personal pursuit.
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Some
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people
are convinced
that
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sports
have a significant role and purpose in uplifting the pride of a
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country
.
However
, others refute that the essence of
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sports
is to
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make
certain
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people
become
physically
fit.

We
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must
acknowledge the belief of others that
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sports
have
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important
roles in showing the talent of the
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different
individuals. The
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sports
have signified that a
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country
has the ability to display their unique abilities and strengths to
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other
such as boxing, basketball, swimming and
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other
strenuous
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sports
. The
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sports
have
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seen
as an enormous lure which has created impacts and suspense for the sport's proponents. It has made the
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country’s
tension at
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ease
whenever there is an Olympic match or national
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sports
completion.
For instance
, whenever there is an international boxing competition between the Philippines and
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other
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countries
, the attention of the supporters
are diverted
on the fights of their
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country
. The international and national
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sports
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events
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often
erase the tension and distance between nations and tribes and offer an excellent opportunity to bring
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people
together.
For instance
, India and Pakistan have their
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own
political issues
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but
their friendship remains constant in the case of cricket sport.

Not everyone can become professional
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sports
personnel and for them, the
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sport
is a great way of
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doing
the physical
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exercise
and remaining fit. Almost every outdoor
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sport
requires a great deal of physical movement and it can be a great alternative of
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doing
cumbersome
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exercises
. It
is proven
that
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people
who
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start
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doing
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exercises
in a gym
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often
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stop
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doing
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so
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because
of time constraint or lack of interests.
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But
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people
who
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get
involved in
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sports
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often
continue this habit for a long time
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because
of their passion for the game.

In conclusion
,
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people
who are
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good
at a
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sport
take it as their career and consider it to be a
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good
role for the others. This is to
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some
extent is a
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good
way of perusing a career and inspiring others.
On the contrary
,
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many
others take
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sports
activity as part of their daily
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exercises
and do not take it as their career either
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because
they are not optimistic about the future of the
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sports
profession or not
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good
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enough
to be a renowned
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sports
person.
5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
44Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay Some people consider sport to be their career and role in the society. For others, it is mostly a workout to keep them fit. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
394 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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