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Smoking is prohibited in public places in many countries. Many office authorities also impose restrictions on smoking within the office premises. While many people welcome this restriction and suggest that smoking should be banned, others, however, feel that it takes away some of our freedom. v.1

Smoking is prohibited in public places in many countries. Many office authorities also impose restrictions on smoking within the office premises. While many people welcome this restriction and suggest that smoking should be banned, others, however, feel that it takes away some of our freedom. v. 1
Smoking and its ample consequences are widely discussed these days all over the world. Research and studies point out that the active and passive smoking are equally threatening to the individual and society. Though there is a small issue regarding the restriction: personal freedom, I hold the view that the ban and restriction on smoking, especially in public places and office settings, are totally acceptable. One of the obvious reasons, public smoking causes various health hazards. To be more precise, major causes of the lung, oral cancers and heart ailments is none other than tobacco smoking. Prevention is better than cure. Instead of spending a large amount of money to treat these kinds of diseases, government’s decision on banning and controlling on smoking is more economic and effective. Furthermore, passive smoking, which usually happens in public places, claims thousands of innocent people's life across the world. At this juncture, prevention of little freedom like allowing public cigarette flaming is not justifiable. To cite an example, in the USA, the public smoking ban reduces the passive smokers’ cancer rates. Another reason to support my view is that the public smoking restrictions decline the fire risk rate to a great extent. In other words, in this congested world, allowing of public smoking is like adding fuel to the fire. Careless handling of cigarette fire causes major fire problem. It claims not only thousands of innocent lives but also public possessions. These social problems can be wisely handled by control of public smoking restrictions. In the UK, public smoking ban immensely reduced the building fire incidents in cities is the best epitome. However, an army of people claims that this is the breach of personal freedom. Perhaps it may be true to some degree, but we cannot deny that the public safety is much more important than mild freedom block. To crown it all, ban and control of public smoking are beneficial, especially for the individual as well as the society. Banning public smoking will enhance the public health and safety in many ways. To consider banning smoking a huge positive impact its ignorable drawbacks are completely negligible.
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smoking
are
equally
threatening to the individual and society. Though there is a
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small
issue regarding the
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: personal
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freedom
, I hold the view that the
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ban
and
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on
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smoking
,
especially
in
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public
places and office settings, are
totally
acceptable.

One of the obvious reasons,
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public
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smoking
causes various health hazards. To be more precise, major causes of the lung, oral cancers and heart ailments is none other than tobacco
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smoking
. Prevention is better than cure.
Instead
of spending a large amount of money to treat these kinds of diseases,
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government
’s decision on banning and controlling on
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smoking
is more economic and effective.
Furthermore
, passive
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smoking
, which
usually
happens in
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public
places, claims thousands of innocent
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people
's life across the world. At this juncture, prevention of
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little
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freedom
like allowing
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public
cigarette flaming is not justifiable. To cite an example, in the USA, the
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public
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smoking
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ban
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reduces
the passive smokers’ cancer rates.

Another reason to support my view is that the
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public
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smoking
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restrictions
decline the
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fire
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risk
rate to a great extent.
In other words
, in this congested world, allowing of
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public
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smoking
is like adding fuel to the
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fire
. Careless handling of cigarette
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fire
causes major
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fire
problem. It claims not
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only
thousands of innocent
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lives
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also
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public
possessions. These social problems can be
wisely
handled by control of
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public
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smoking
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restrictions
. In the UK,
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public
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smoking
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immensely
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reduced
the building
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incidents in cities is the best epitome.
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, an army of
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people
claims that this is the breach of personal
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freedom
. Perhaps it may be true to
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some
degree,
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but
we cannot deny that the
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public
safety is much more
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important
than mild
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freedom
block.

To crown it all,
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ban
and control of
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public
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smoking
are beneficial,
especially
for the individual
as well
as the society. Banning
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public
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smoking
will enhance the
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public
health and safety in
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many
ways. To consider banning
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smoking
a huge
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positive
impact its ignorable drawbacks are completely negligible.
14Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
46Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay Smoking is prohibited in public places in many countries. Many office authorities also impose restrictions on smoking within the office premises. While many people welcome this restriction and suggest that smoking should be banned, others, however, feel that it takes away some of our freedom. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
355 words
6.0
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