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Some people consider price as most important thing to think about when buying product (such as cell phone) or service (e. g medical treatment). Do you agree or disagree? v.4

Some people consider price as most important thing to think about when buying product (such as cell phone) or service (e. g medical treatment). v. 4
It thought by some people that the price of a product or service is essential to consider before deciding to purchase something. While I agree that people need to consider carefully before spending large amount of money in order to avoid debt, the necessity of the purchase must play a role in the decision to buy. It is essential that people take time to reflect on how much money they should spend on an item or service, and whether or not they can actually afford it within their available budget. Over the last few decades the rise in personal debt has escalated as people are tempted to buy goods and service due to pressure from advertising and the increasingly easy access of credit cards. For this reason, any purchase that is costly and is brought using credit card ought to be well thought through, particularly when the item is luxury item that is not actually essential. On the other hand, there are circumstances when the cost of a service or item becomes an irrelevant consideration. A typical example of this would be when some one’s life depends on product or service, such as new treatment for a disease not offered through normal channels. In such case, a person’s budget becomes redundant and the expense should not deter someone proceeding with the purchase. However, these situations are rare and in most circumstances price ought to be considered so that excessive spending is planned and budgeted to avoid serious debt problems. In conclusion, people should deliberate carefully before spending large sums of money on goods and services, except case of dire necessity.
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thought
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some
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people
that the price of a product or
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service
is essential to consider
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before
deciding to
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purchase
something. While I
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agree
that
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people
need to consider
carefully
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before
spending large amount of money in order to avoid debt, the necessity of the
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purchase
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must
play a role in the decision to
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buy
.

It is essential that
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people
take time to reflect on how much money they should spend on an
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item
or
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service
, and
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whether or not
they can actually afford it within their available budget. Over the last few decades the rise in personal debt has escalated as
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people
are tempted
to
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buy
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goods
and
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service
due to pressure from advertising and the
increasingly
easy access of credit cards.
For this reason
, any
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purchase
that is
costly and
is brought
using credit card ought to be well
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thought
through,
particularly
when the
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item
is luxury
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item
that is
not actually essential.

On the other hand
, there are circumstances when the cost of a
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service
or
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item
becomes an irrelevant consideration. A typical example of this would be when
Did you mean "someone"?
some one
’s life depends on product or
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service
, such as new treatment for a disease not offered through normal channels. In such case, a person’s budget becomes redundant and the expense should not deter someone
The pronoun 'someone' is usually used with a third-person or a past tense verb: "proceeds", "proceeded".
proceeding
with the
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purchase
.
However
, these situations are rare and in most circumstances price ought to
be considered
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so
that excessive spending
is planned
and budgeted to avoid serious debt problems.

In conclusion
,
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people
should deliberate
carefully
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before
spending large sums of money on
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goods
and
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
services
, except case of dire necessity.
7Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
19Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
3Mistakes

IELTS essay Some people consider price as most important thing to think about when buying product (such as cell phone) or service (e. g medical treatment). v. 4

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
270 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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