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“When people succeed, it is because of hard work. Luck has nothing to do with success. ” Do you agree or disagree with the quotation above? Use specific reasons and examples to explain your position. v.8

“When people succeed, it is because of hard work. Luck has nothing to do with success. ” with the quotation above? Use specific reasons and examples to explain your position. v. 8
“Luck is nothing but grabbing opportunities in right condition”; my teacher used to say that, in psychology course. This comes true for every realm in human’s life, education, marriage, and work. Although, for some, believing in luck means a lot, from competing in games to taking in various exams, for others, success has nothing to do with luck. By comparison, how can recognize the best perspective? For judging, in my opinion, the latter group is superior to the former due to lots of needed time for progressing in various competitions and fulfillment of right condition for success. To begin with, the most significant feature for improvement is consuming time. Spending time takes of essentials into account for improving various skills such as language, work, or even perspectives. The latter is so vital; my cosine told me years before: “Concern with English language, it will be practical one day; lots of companies prefer experts who learned such skill”; however, my perspective was completely different in comparison with my cosine. By passing time, importance of language revealed for me; though, my cosine brought his work forward much faster than me. Additionally, attempts that once was thought to characterize as imperative part of success its existence without wining opportunity in right condition is half-done. Some do all their tries in inappropriate conditions like studying course at first weeks of semester and releasing that near the exam. My friend as a successful person explained that: “At first weeks of term, from sun to set I loiter in streets, maintain with my girlfriends, and do anything but studying; however, near exams, all nights turn out to me as day”. He do his entire attempts in the right condition. All in all, I contended that not wasting time and recognizing the right condition are two factors for succeeding. For those who saw victorious persons, isn’t that what you think, right?
“Luck is nothing
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grabbing opportunities in
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; my teacher
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used
to say that, in psychology course. This
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comes
true for every realm in human’s life, education, marriage, and work. Although, for
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some
, believing in luck means a lot, from competing in games to taking in various exams, for others, success has nothing to do with luck. By comparison, how can recognize the best perspective? For judging, in my opinion, the latter group is superior to the former due to lots of needed
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time
for progressing in various competitions and fulfillment of
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right
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condition
for success.

To
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begin
with, the most significant feature for improvement is consuming
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time
. Spending
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time
takes of essentials into account for improving various
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skills
such as language, work, or even perspectives. The latter is
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so
vital; my cosine
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told
me years
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before
: “Concern with English language, it will be practical one day; lots of
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companies
prefer experts who learned such
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skill
”;
however
, my perspective was completely
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different
in comparison
with my cosine. By passing
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time
, importance of language revealed for me; though, my cosine brought his work forward much faster than me.

Additionally
, attempts that once was
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thought
to characterize as imperative part of success its existence without wining opportunity in
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right
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condition
is half-done.
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Some
do all their tries in inappropriate conditions like studying course at
first
weeks of semester and releasing that near the exam. My friend as a successful person
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explained
that: “At
first
weeks of term, from sun to set I loiter in streets, maintain with my girlfriends, and do anything
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but
studying;
however
, near exams, all nights turn out to me as day”. He
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do
his entire attempts in the
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right
condition.

All in all, I contended that not wasting
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time
and recognizing the
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right
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condition
are two factors for succeeding. For those who
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saw
victorious persons, isn’t that what you
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think
,
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right
?
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15Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay “When people succeed, it is because of hard work. Luck has nothing to do with success. ” with the quotation above? Use specific reasons and examples to explain your position. v. 8

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
314 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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