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Some people consider price as most important thing to think about when buying product (such as cell phone) or service (e. g. medical treatment). Do you agree or disagree? v.3

Some people consider price as most important thing to think about when buying product (such as cell phone) or service (e. g. medical treatment). v. 3
When some product draws our attention, usually our first reaction is to look up the price. It is automatic, we want to know if we can buy it or not. It applies to any product, from technology to health services, all of us give considerable importance to the price. Besides, if we can get the same product for a lower price, indeed we will. Therefore, I agree with people who think that the price is the most important thing. Moreover, when you walk through a store, usually you can see different price offers, remarked in different colours to highlight over the other products. For example, many supermarkets show typical 3 for 2 product offers, or discounts up to 50%, trying to encourage the customers to buy due to their low prices. In other words, the experts who work for the best brands and big companies also believe that the price is the most important thing. However, there are some aspects that people commonly give more weight, such as performance, quality, or experience. For instance, you can not compare the new iPhone with some low-level phones, in terms of quality and performance the iPhone is much beyond. Besides, you cannot compare two different health service products which give you distinct coverage. To sum up, if you are looking for products with similar characteristics, the price will be very important when the final decision comes up. Despite this, price could become a not important thing if the products do not offer analogous aspects. In particular with products that can give you an improved experience than others cheaper.
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draws our attention,
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our
first
reaction is to look up the
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price
. It is automatic, we want to know if we can
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buy
it or not. It
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applies to
any
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product
, from technology to health services, all of us
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give
considerable importance to the
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price
.
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, if we can
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get
the same
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product
for a lower
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price
,
indeed
we will.
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, I
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people
who
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think
that the
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price
is the most
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important
thing.

Moreover
, when you walk through a store,
usually
you can
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see
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different
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price
offers, remarked in
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different
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colours
to highlight over the other
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products
.
For example
,
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supermarkets
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show
typical 3 for 2
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product
offers, or discounts up to 50%, trying to encourage the customers to
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buy
due to their low
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prices
.
In other words
, the experts who work for the best brands and
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big
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companies
also
believe that the
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price
is the most
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important
thing.

However
, there are
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some
aspects that
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people
commonly
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give
more weight, such as performance, quality, or experience.
For instance
, you can not compare the new iPhone with
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some
low-level phones, in terms of quality and performance the iPhone is much beyond.
Besides
, you cannot compare two
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different
health service
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products
which
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give
you distinct coverage.

To sum up, if you are looking for
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products
with similar characteristics, the
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price
will be
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very
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important
when the final decision
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comes
up. Despite this,
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price
could become a not
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important
thing if the
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products
do not offer analogous aspects.
In particular
with
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products
that can
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give
you an
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improved
experience than others cheaper.
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8Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay Some people consider price as most important thing to think about when buying product (such as cell phone) or service (e. g. medical treatment). v. 3

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
265 words
8
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 8.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 8.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 8.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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