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In the past, lectures were used as a way of teaching large numbers of students, but now with the development of technology for education, many people think there is no justification for attending lectures. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion? v.4

In the past, lectures were used as a way of teaching large numbers of students, but now with the development of technology for education, many people think there is no justification for attending lectures. with this opinion? v. 4
Modern technology is an indeed a blessing to the mankind. Moreover, technology facilitated human life in uncountable ways. Because of that, some short sighted people argue that students do not need to attend lectures physically. In my opinion, I strongly disagree with above notion. There are ample reasons which are in favour of my statement. First of all, by attending lectures, students could ask faculties about doubts of the topic, related questions, any concerns about subjects and most importantly about the exam. However, if students stop attending lectures they would have many questions inside and the lack of information related to a subject. Secondly, man is a social animal which like to interact with people. Thus, pupils stop going to classes they often feel frustrated and lonely. Which leads to them psychological problems. Thirdly, nowadays pupils like to access library, group study rooms and so on, which is not possible if they do not attend school. Lastly, many subjects have more weight of practical knowledge like chemistry, machining labs and design related courses. So, in such cases pupils should have to go for participating in classes. On the other hand, some people argue that with the advancement of technology pupils can study at home with the help of online classes, lectures, tutorials and so forth. They also argue that nowadays students' access well known professor lectures by only a click. As a result, of the invention of the internet they can find much information, videos, pictures, research paper related to their studies. In conclusion, I do admit that the internet can provide all sources of information, but attending lectures, one can live social and student life which is extremely necessary in today's fast growing world.
Modern technology is an
indeed
a blessing to the mankind.
Moreover
, technology facilitated human life in uncountable ways.
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Because
of that,
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some
This word is normally spelled with hyphen.
short sighted
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people
argue that
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students
do not need to attend
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
lectures
physically
. In my opinion, I
strongly
disagree with above notion.

There are ample reasons which are in
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favour
of my statement.
This phrase is redundant. Consider using "first".
First of all
, by attending
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lectures
,
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students
could ask faculties about doubts of the topic,
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related
questions, any concerns about subjects and most
importantly
about the exam.
However
, if
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students
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stop
attending
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lectures
they would have
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
many
questions inside and the lack of information
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related
to a subject.
Secondly
,
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man
is a social animal which like to interact with
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
.
Thus
,
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pupils
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
stop
going to classes they
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
often
feel frustrated and lonely.
“Which” at the beginning of a sentence usually requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
Which
leads to them psychological problems.
Thirdly
, nowadays
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pupils
like to access library, group study rooms and
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so
on, which is not possible if they do not attend school.
Lastly
,
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many
subjects have more weight of practical knowledge like chemistry, machining labs and design
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related
courses.
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So
, in such cases
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pupils
should
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
have to
go for participating in classes.

On the other hand
,
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some
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
argue that with the advancement of technology
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pupils
can study at home with the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
help
of online classes,
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
lectures
, tutorials and
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so
forth. They
also
argue that nowadays students' access well known professor
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lectures
by
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
only
a click.
As a result
, of the invention of the internet they can find much information, videos, pictures, research paper
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
related
to their studies.

In conclusion
, I do admit that the internet can provide all sources of information,
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
but
attending
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lectures
, one can
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live
social and
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student
life which is
extremely
necessary in
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today
's
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fast
growing world.
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8Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
8Mistakes
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IELTS essay In the past, lectures were used as a way of teaching large numbers of students, but now with the development of technology for education, many people think there is no justification for attending lectures. with this opinion? v. 4

Essay
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4 paragraphs
285 words
8
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