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Some people consider price as most important thing to consider when buying a product or service. Do you agree or disagree? v.1

Some people consider price as most important thing to consider when buying a product or service. v. 1
Some people say price is the most significant factor to be considered while buying a product or sevice. Although price is certainly one aspect that one has to look after at the time of purchasing things, it certainly is not the most important. That's why, I contend this assertion. First of all, price is not the prime factor over quality of the products or services. In other words, quality is to be considered the most important factor as pricing do not determine the feature or traits of the materials that we purchase. For instance, the vendors sell the same quality product in a low price rather than in the supermarket. Moreover, quality determines the sustainabilty of the products. Consequently, price is not the salient thing to consider while purchasing the materials. Furthermore, when it comes to services they must see the facilities, the doctor which is going to help you, the person who is suffering for seviour problem will be cure soon people should think about this rather than seeing price. If you medical service is phenomenal than they should not see the price. To show an example, if a person is suffer say such as flue and he is taking medicines but he is not getting recover, he will not go to some professional doctor because he is saving money. However, but he is not seeing that in medicine which he is taking since long but not getting cure, he is wasting money on medicine but, instead of he could have consult a professional doctor. Last and foremost, people should not see money when they get proper service and a product. It will be beneficial to them only in future. To examplify, if they go to some good doctors they will not get any problem for long time. In addition to product if they buy products of good quality they do not have to see for long time like say for 10 - 12 years for example if they by microwave. To draw a conclusion, price is not important when you get proper facilities and services and if one have enough money than they should not see money. I my opinion, would say if people get better thing they should prefer that thing most and do not see any other things to get cheap things you will get suffer you are getting things proper than grab it.
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. Although
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look after at the time of purchasing things, it
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. That's why, I contend this assertion.

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,
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price
is not the prime factor over
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quality
of the
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products
or
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services
.
In other words
,
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quality
is to
be considered
the most
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important
factor as pricing do not determine the feature or traits of the materials that we
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purchase
.
For instance
, the vendors sell the same
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quality
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product
in a low
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price
rather
than in the supermarket.
Moreover
,
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quality
determines the
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sustainabilty
of the
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products
.
Consequently
,
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price
is not the salient thing to consider while purchasing the materials.

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, when it
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to
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services
they
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must
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see
the facilities, the doctor which is going to
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help
you, the person who is suffering for
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seviour
problem will be
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cure
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soon
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people
should
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think
about this
rather
than seeing
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price
.
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If
you medical
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service
is
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phenomenal
than they should not
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see
the
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price
. To
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show
an example, if a person is
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suffer
say such as
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flue and
he is taking medicines
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but
he is not getting recover, he will not go to
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some
professional doctor
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because
he is saving
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money
.
However
,
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he is not seeing that in medicine which he is taking since long
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but
not getting cure, he is wasting
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money
on medicine
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,
instead
of he could have
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consult
a professional doctor.

Last and foremost,
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people
should not
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see
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money
when they
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get
proper
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service
and a
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product
. It will be beneficial to them
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only
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in future
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examplify
, if they go to
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good
doctors they will not
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get
any problem for long time.
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to
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product
if they
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buy
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products
of
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quality
they do not
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for long time like say for
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10 - 12
years
for example
if they
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by
microwave.

To draw a conclusion,
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price
is not
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important
when you
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get
proper facilities and
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services
and if one have
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enough
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money
than they should not
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see
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money
. I my opinion, would say if
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people
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get
better thing they should prefer that thing most and do not
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see
any other things to
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get
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cheap
things you will
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get
suffer you are getting things proper than grab it.
15Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
34Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
15Mistakes

IELTS essay Some people consider price as most important thing to consider when buying a product or service. v. 1

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
398 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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Lexical Resource: 5.0
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