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Some people claim that there are more disadvantages of the car than it's advantages. Do you agree or disagree? Discuss the advantages and disadvantages of having a car. v.1

Some people claim that there are more disadvantages of the car than it's advantages. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages of having a car. v. 1
In recent years, owning a car has become very essential. Many individuals are of the view that there are more downsides to a car than upsides. I strongly disagree with this point of view mainly because the merits such as easy transportation and convinence outweights the demerits such as enviromental pollution and congestion. This essay will discuss both the merits and demerits of owning a car. There are many major upsides to purchasing a vehicle in recent years. One of the major upside is for easy transportation. In other words, a personal means of transportation is more essential and durable than having to take public transportation. Imagine, if you will, a family of five traveling from point A to point B, would move easily in their personal car than in public transport. A study carried out in 2018, by the People's Magazine revealed that about 70% of the population today prefer driving to taking public transportation mainly because of easy commute. Hence, resulting in less public transportation. In addition, this provides convinence to individuals as well as families residing within the countryside where public transportation is minimally available. However, there are also major downsides to this such as enviromental pollution and congestion. One of the major issue facing our environment today is air pollution and this can be caused by smoke from vehciles which depletes the ozone layer. Take for example, the 2019 study carried out by the World's Health Organization which, suggested that about 60% of the ozone layer has been depleted which, is approximately two times more than in 1990. Thus, resulting in major health issues as well as climate changes to the environment. Furthermore, owning a car increases congestion within the society thus, increasing traffic as well as pollution. In conclusion, while there are demerits such as enviromental pollution and congestion, there are also many major benefits to owning a car which includes, easy transportation and also convinence. If the government would provide automatic cars and also increase major roads these would go a long way in aiding the depletion of the ozone layer thereby reducing air pollution and congestion in major cities and towns.
In recent years,
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owning
a
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car
has become
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very
essential.
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Many
individuals are of the view that there are more downsides to a
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car
than upsides. I
strongly
disagree with this point of view
mainly
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because
the merits such as
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easy
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transportation
and
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convinence
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outweights
the demerits such as
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enviromental
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pollution
and
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congestion
. This essay will discuss both the merits and demerits of
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owning
a car.

There are
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many
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major
upsides to purchasing a vehicle in recent years. One of the
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major
upside is for
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easy
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transportation
.
In other words
, a personal means of
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transportation
is more essential and durable than having to take
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public
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transportation
. Imagine, if you will, a family of five traveling from point A to point B, would
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move
easily
in their personal
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car
than in
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public
transport. A study carried out in 2018, by the
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People
's Magazine revealed that about 70% of the population
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today
prefer driving to taking
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public
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transportation
mainly
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because
of
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easy
commute.
Hence
, resulting in less
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public
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transportation
.
In addition
, this provides
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convinence
to individuals
as well
as families residing within the countryside where
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public
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transportation
is
minimally
available.

However
, there are
also
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major
downsides to this such as
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enviromental
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pollution
and
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congestion
. One of the
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major
issue facing our environment
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today
is air
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pollution
and this can
be caused
by smoke from
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vehciles
which depletes the ozone layer. Take
for example
, the 2019 study carried out by the World's Health Organization which, suggested that about 60% of the ozone layer has
been depleted
which, is approximately two times more than in 1990.
Thus
, resulting in
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major
health issues
as well
as climate
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changes
to the environment.
Furthermore
,
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owning
a
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car
increases
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congestion
within the society
thus
, increasing traffic
as well
as pollution.

In conclusion
, while there are demerits such as
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enviromental
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pollution
and
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congestion
, there are
also
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many
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major
benefits to
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owning
a
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car
which includes,
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easy
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transportation
and
also
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convinence
. If the
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government
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would provide
automatic
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cars
and
also
increase
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major
roads these would go a long way in aiding the depletion of the ozone layer thereby reducing air
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pollution
and
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congestion
in
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major
cities and towns.
21Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
45Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
9Mistakes

IELTS essay Some people claim that there are more disadvantages of the car than it's advantages. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages of having a car. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
358 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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