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Some people claim that there are more disadvantages of the car than its advantages. Do you agree or disagree? Discuss the advantages and disadvantages of having a car. v.2

Some people claim that there are more disadvantages of the car than its advantages. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages of having a car. v. 2
A lot of individuals argue that there are a greater number of disadvantages of a motor vehicle than its advantages. I strongly disagree with this statement. The follwoing essay will highlight both the advantages and disadvantages of a car. The prime disadvantage of a car is that it causes pollution. Since, the vehicle runs on fossil fuels, it augments the level of pollution in the environment. As the number of cars increase, the quality of air decreases in the reverse proportion. For example, a study by the Columbia University shows that each year, the air quality goes down by 28%; because of the increase in the number of cars on the road. However, a car provides us with the luxury of convenience. We can travel as we want at the time of our choice. There is no waiting time required to wait for a bus or a train. For example, if someone wants to visit far end of a city, he or she has to wait for the public transport. Another advantage of a car is that it saves time. Public transportation covers a longer route; hence, incrementing the duration required to reach a destination. But, with a car, you can take your direct route. Therefore, saving up on time. In conclusion, a car does have its disadvatage of contributing to the detrimental quality of the oxygen, that we breathe. However, due to its advantages of allowing the population to have a choice and saving up on time; I firmly am of the opinion that a car has more advantages than disadvantages.
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individuals argue that there are a greater number of disadvantages of a motor vehicle than its
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advantages
. I
strongly
disagree with this statement. The
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follwoing
essay will highlight both the
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advantages
and disadvantages of a car.

The prime
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disadvantage
of a
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car
is that it causes pollution. Since, the vehicle runs on fossil fuels, it augments the level of pollution in the environment. As the number of
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cars
increase, the quality of air decreases in the reverse proportion.
For example
, a study by the Columbia University
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shows
that each year, the air quality goes down by 28%;
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because
of the increase in the number of
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cars
on the road.

However
, a
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car
provides us with the luxury of convenience. We can travel as we want at the
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time
of our choice. There is no waiting
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time
required to wait for a bus or a train.
For example
, if someone wants to visit far
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end
of a city, he or she
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has to
wait for the public transport. Another
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advantage
of a
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car
is that it saves
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time
. Public transportation covers a longer route;
hence
, incrementing the duration required to reach a destination.
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But
, with a
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car
, you can take your direct route.
Therefore
, saving up on time.

In conclusion
, a
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car
does have its
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disadvatage
of contributing to the detrimental quality of the oxygen, that we breathe.
However
, due to its
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advantages
of allowing the population to have a choice and saving up on
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time
; I
firmly
am of the opinion that a
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car
has more
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advantages
than disadvantages.
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18Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay Some people claim that there are more disadvantages of the car than its advantages. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages of having a car. v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
262 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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