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Some people claim that public transport should be free of charge, while other disagree. Discuss both views and give your opinion. v.2

Some people claim that public transport should be free of charge, while other disagree. v. 2
Nowadays, many people believe that public transport should be made free of cost to all as more and more commuters are travelling by their private vehicles while some disagree with this context and think that there should be certain charges on this facility. To start with, public transport is the backbone of every nation. It interconnects various cities, towns and important places of a country. So it requires lots of investment and this is collected through charging fares. Moreover, anything which is free is not valued highly by its countrymen. Also, waivering travel fares will result in financial loss as the government has to pay for the fuel, salaries and many such things. Subsequently, affecting the economy of a nation. On the other hand, few people argue that public transportation such as buses, railways should be made free of cost as most people use private vehicles for commuting. This argument holds good as most of these enterprises are running in pathetic economic condition. The income generated by them is pretty low and running costs are high. In addition, people think it can be beneficial to weaker sections of society who do not have enough money to pay while moving from one place to another. Another point is that making them absolutely free also helps the country as it has to deal with less traffic chaos. To conclude, I opine that dispensing public transport completely and making it free is a short sighted approach. Rather a mechanism should be created by the government where the journey prices are at the lowest and revenue generation is highest thereby creating a win-win situation for all.
Nowadays,
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many
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people
believe that
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public
transport should
be made
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free
of cost to all as more and more commuters are travelling by their private vehicles while
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some
disagree with this context and
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think
that there should be certain charges on this facility.

To
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start
with,
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public
transport is the backbone of every nation. It interconnects various cities, towns and
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important
places of a country.
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So
it requires lots of investment and this
is collected
through charging fares.
Moreover
, anything which is
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free
is not valued
highly
by its countrymen.
Also
,
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waivering
travel fares will result in financial loss as the
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government
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has to
pay for the fuel, salaries and
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many
such things.
Subsequently
, affecting the economy of a nation.

On the other hand
, few
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people
argue that
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public
transportation such as buses, railways should
be made
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free
of cost as most
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people
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
use
private vehicles for commuting. This argument holds
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good
as most of these enterprises are running in pathetic economic condition. The income generated by them is pretty low and running costs are high.
In addition
,
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people
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
think
it can be beneficial to weaker sections of society who do not have
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
enough
money to pay while moving from one place to another. Another point is that making them
absolutely
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free
also
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
helps
the country as it
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has to
deal with less traffic chaos.

To conclude
, I opine that dispensing
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public
transport completely and making it
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
free
is a
This word is normally spelled with hyphen.
short sighted
approach.
Rather
a mechanism should
be created
by the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
government
where the journey prices are at the lowest and revenue generation is
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highest
thereby creating a win-win situation for all.
8Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
13Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
3Mistakes

IELTS essay Some people claim that public transport should be free of charge, while other disagree. v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
272 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
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  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
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    Present relevant ideas
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