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telling the truth is the most important factor of any relationship, do you agree or disagree? ? v.2

telling the truth is the most important factor of any relationship, ? v. 2
Generally speaking, telling the truth is a very crucial part in our life. It is important because, it is one of the most fundamentals in any healthy relationship. If the people’s opinion is going to be considered. In my view, I believe that telling the truth is one of the most important considerations for the following two essential reasons. First, telling the truth is a solid basic for building the trust between the people. When you face a problem in your daily life, the first thing you will do is choosing somebody you trust to ask him for an advise. For example, a few months ago I got a job at the pharmacy as a pharmacy technician. I had a hard time to understand who the system works, first. After a while, with the practicing and asking the co-workers I mastered my job. One day, I was working at the drop of window at the pharmacy, there was a patient asking for her medication. I looked it up in the system, but I didn’t find anything. I told her that we have not revieved any prescription from the doctor, yet. Once she heard that, she started yeilling at me; and she started accuse me that I have stolen her prescription. After a while, I got a notice in my mail form the court that she wants suing me. I was shocked, I start crying and I went to my friend house to tell her about that, because I don’t want to tell my mum as she was sick. I asked my friend to not mention what happend in front of my mum. One day, I returned from work, I found my mum crying and was not able to take a breath. I asked her, she said your friend told me about whats going on. I called my friend, she denied that. She was the only person knows about that. At that point, I stopped taking to her again. Second, telling the truth create a friendly, pleasant environment between people. When you tell the truth, you will avoid the misunderstanding with the people you are dealing with. For example, my husband and I went through a lot of problems while we were engaged. The reason behind that is he used to lie to me even though he was not doing something aweful. Everytime I catch that he is lying to me, he made up an excuse. We were always arguing, yelling at each other. He creat unhealthy environment to live at. We ended up separating, and leaving each other. By the way of conclusion. In my perspective and the way I look at it, I believe that telling the truth is very important issue you must have while dealing with people, for the reasons mentioned above.
Generally
speaking,
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telling
the
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truth
is a
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very
crucial part in our life. It is
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important
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because
, it is one of the most fundamentals in any healthy relationship.
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If
the
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people’s
opinion is going to
be considered
. In my view, I believe that
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telling
the
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truth
is one of the most
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important
considerations for the following two essential reasons.

First
,
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telling
the
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truth
is a solid basic for building the trust between the
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people
. When you face a problem in your daily life, the
first
thing you will do is choosing somebody you trust to ask him for an
Did you mean "advice" (noun)?
advise
.
For example
, a few months ago I
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
got
a job at the pharmacy as a pharmacy technician. I had a
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
hard
time to understand who the system works,
first
. After a while, with the practicing and asking the co-workers I mastered my job. One day, I was working at the drop of window at the pharmacy, there was a patient asking for her medication. I looked it up in the system,
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but
I didn’t find anything. I
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told
her that we have not
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revieved
any prescription from the doctor,
yet
. Once she heard that, she
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started
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yeilling
at me; and she
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started
accuse me that I have stolen her prescription. After a while, I
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got
a notice in my mail
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form
the court that she wants
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suing
me. I
was shocked
, I
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start
crying and I went to my
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friend
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house
to
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tell
her about that,
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because
I don’t want to
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tell
my mum as she was sick. I asked my
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friend
to not mention what
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happend
in front of my mum. One day, I returned from work, I found my mum crying and was not able to take a breath. I asked her, she said your
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friend
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told
me about
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whats
going on. I called my
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friend
, she denied that. She was the
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only
person knows about that. At that point, I
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stopped
taking to her again.

Second,
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telling
the
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truth
create a friendly, pleasant environment between
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people
. When you
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tell
the
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truth
, you will avoid the misunderstanding with the
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people
you are dealing with.
For example
, my husband and I went through
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a lot of
problems while we
were engaged
. The reason behind
that is
he
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used
to lie to me
even though
he was not doing something
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aweful
.
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Everytime
I catch that he is lying to me, he made up an excuse. We were always arguing, yelling at each other. He
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creat
unhealthy environment to
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live
at. We ended up separating, and leaving each other.

By the way of conclusion. In my perspective and the way I look at it, I believe that
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telling
the
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truth
is
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very
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important
issue you
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must
have while dealing with
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people
, for the reasons mentioned above.
9Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
20Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
11Mistakes

IELTS essay telling the truth is the most important factor of any relationship, ? v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
465 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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