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Should museums and art galleries be free of charge for the general public, or should a charge, even a voluntary charge, be levied for admittance? v.2

Should museums and art galleries be free of charge for the general public, or should a charge, even a voluntary charge, be levied for admittance? v. 2
One very complex issue in today’s world is the funding of museums and art galleries. There is an argument that they should be free to the general public and funded by governments, but there is also a case for saying that they should charge an entrance fee like other attractions. In this essay, I am going to examine both sides of this issue. Those who argue that museums should be free typically make one of two arguments. The first argument is that institutions like museums are a public service and therefore there should be free access to the man in the street. If for example there was a charge only the wealthy could afford to enjoy works of art. The second argument is that if they did levy a charge, fewer people would go to museums. This would be serious as they are educational institutions and standards would fall. In contrast, there is only one major argument on the other side of the debate. This is that both museums and art galleries need to charge an entrance fee if they are to survive in the modern world. Governments do not have sufficient funds to subsidise all such institutions and there are other priorities for public money. Therefore these galleries and museums need to charge their customers not only to survive but to update their exhibitions and make new purchases. By way of illustration, the Tate Modern in London could not have been founded without revenue from admissions. My personal position is that there is no clear answer to this question as there are such strong arguments on both sides. Perhaps it is possible for some museums and galleries to charge fees and for others not to.
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today
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museums
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galleries
. There is an
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argument
that they should be free to the
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general public
and funded by
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governments
,
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but
there is
also
a case for saying that they should
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charge
an entrance fee like
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other
attractions. In this essay, I am going to examine both sides of this issue.

Those who argue that
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museums
should be free
typically
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make
one of two
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arguments
. The
first
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argument
is that institutions like
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museums
are a public service and
therefore
there should be free access to the
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man
in the street.
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for example
there was a
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charge
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only
the wealthy could afford to enjoy works of art. The second
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argument
is that if they did levy a
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charge
, fewer
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people
would go to
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museums
. This would be serious as they are educational institutions and standards would fall.

In contrast
, there is
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only
one major
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argument
on the
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other
side of the debate. This is that both
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museums
and art
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galleries
need to
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charge
an entrance fee if they are to survive in the modern world.
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Governments
do not have sufficient funds to
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subsidise
all such institutions and there are
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other
priorities for public money.
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Therefore
these
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galleries
and
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museums
need to
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charge
their customers not
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only
to survive
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but
to update their exhibitions and
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make
new
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purchases
. By way of illustration, the Tate Modern in London could not have
been founded
without revenue from admissions.

My personal position is that there is no
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clear
answer to this question as there are such strong
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arguments
on both sides. Perhaps it is possible for
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some
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museums
and
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galleries
to
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charge
fees and for others not to.
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26Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay Should museums and art galleries be free of charge for the general public, or should a charge, even a voluntary charge, be levied for admittance? v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
285 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
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  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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