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Some people claim that not enough of the waste from homes is recycled. They say that the only way to increase recycling is for government to make it a legal requirement. To what extent do you think laws are needed? v.7

Some people claim that not enough of the waste from homes is recycled. They say that the only way to increase recycling is for government to make it a legal requirement. v. 7
In this contemporary era, the misuse produced by the people has increased dramatically. Also, people are less aware about the impact of the rubbish on the environment. Some people believe that the government needs to enact some stricter laws for the recycling of the wastage whereas the others argue that it is not an appropriate way to reduce wastage production. I totally agree with the aforesaid statement. First and foremost, the government needs to restrict the usage of plastic by enforcing some strict laws because the plastic plays a vital role in this situation. It does not decompose in the soil and the process of recycling plastic is more complex and time consuming. Also, industries should be penalized for overproduction of plastic. Plastic packaging should be banned by the government. For example, in Japan people think 3R (reduce, reuse and recycle)when they dispose their rubbish At last, some rewards given to the people by the government can boost their efforts. In addition to the above, if the wastage produced by households reached beyond the certain level, then the government should restrict government facilities like water and electricity because of this, the people of that house will reduce their rubbish and recycled them effectively. Also, the government should divide public dustbins in three categories: degradable, non degradable and hazardous. Due to this, people ought to dump their fouls in regard bins. So, the process of recycling may look easy in initial stages. On the other hand, only enforcing these laws will not mitigate this situation, but abide these rules strictly to people by the government will help. Also, the government should organize some campaigns along with the rules will aware layman more effectively. Owing to this, people will not only think about recycling, but also, they would buy more eco friendly products which are more suitable for the environment. These small steps can go a long way in saving energy. To conclude, government needs to include some mandatory subjects of the environment in the school should be a more important way to mitigate rubbish production.
In this contemporary era, the misuse produced by the
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people
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has
increased
dramatically
.
Also
,
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people
are less aware about the impact of the
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rubbish
on the environment.
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Some
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people
believe that the
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government
needs to enact
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some
stricter laws for the
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recycling
of the wastage whereas the others argue that it is not an appropriate way to
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reduce
wastage production. I
totally
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agree
with the aforesaid statement.

First
and foremost, the
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government
needs to restrict the usage of
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plastic
by enforcing
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some
strict laws
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because
the
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plastic
plays a vital role in this situation. It does not decompose in the soil and the process of
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recycling
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plastic
is more complex and
This word is normally spelled with hyphen.
time consuming
.
Also
, industries should
be penalized
for overproduction of
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plastic
.
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Plastic
packaging should
be banned
by the
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government
.
For example
, in Japan
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people
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think
3R (
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reduce
, reuse and recycle)when they dispose their
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rubbish
At last,
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some
rewards
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given
to the
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people
by the
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government
can boost their efforts.

In addition
to the above, if the wastage produced by households reached beyond the certain level, then the
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government
should restrict
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government
facilities like water and electricity
because of this
, the
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people
of that
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house
will
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reduce
their
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rubbish
and recycled them
effectively
.
Also
, the
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government
should divide public dustbins in three categories: degradable,
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non degradable
and hazardous. Due to this,
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people
ought to dump their fouls in regard bins.
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So
, the process of
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recycling
may look easy in initial stages.

On the other hand
,
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only
enforcing these laws will not mitigate this situation,
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but
abide these
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rules
strictly
to
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people
by the
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government
will
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help
.
Also
, the
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government
should organize
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some
campaigns along with the
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rules
will aware layman more
effectively
. Owing to this,
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people
will not
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only
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think
about
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recycling
,
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but
also
, they would
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buy
more
This word is normally spelled with hyphen.
eco friendly
products which are more suitable for the environment. These
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small
steps can go a long way in saving energy.

To conclude
,
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government
needs to include
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
mandatory subjects of the environment in the school should be a more
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
important
way to mitigate
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
rubbish
production.
13Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
32Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
4Mistakes

IELTS essay Some people claim that not enough of the waste from homes is recycled. They say that the only way to increase recycling is for government to make it a legal requirement. v. 7

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
344 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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