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Some people claim that not enough of the waste from homes is recycled. They say that the only way to increase recycling is for governments to make it a legal requirement. To what extent do you think laws are needed to make people recycle more of their waste? v.4

Some people claim that not enough of the waste from homes is recycled. They say that the only way to increase recycling is for governments to make it a legal requirement. v. 4
The majority of people believe that recycling is the best way to protect the environment, however a few numbers of us ignore the importance of issues caused by wastes. Some opine the governments should make it a legal requirement. I completely agree with this statement and I think that regulations can result earlier than other ways. Firstly, the laws will change the culture during a long period of time. For example, in France people were whipped if did not pass the road by the pedestrian line which caused people today never cross the road wherever they want. Making a law on wastes will result in paying more attention to actions such as separating the recycling and non-recycling rubbish in homes. Secondly, severe acts can prevent people from making wastes if there are any taxes putting on it. Consequently, environmental issues such as leaving trashes in the forests or throwing them in the seas will become more less. By taxing people will be aware of the wastes they make, moreover the revenue can spend for saving the nature. Besides, this will help to making less wastes which leads to less recycling expenses. On the other hand, governments should provide the basic needs to reach this goal, such as trash cans or recycling factories. For instance, if people have no place to put their plastics, glasses, and papers separately, they blend them. Therefore, municipalities must install suitable equipment for citizens. In conclusion, most of the people are aware of importance of recycling waste, however some ignore this can be fined by governments. Since participating in waste recycling is not a cultural behaviour, ruling is the best solution to change it immediately.
The majority of
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people
believe that
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recycling
is the best way to protect the environment,
however
a few numbers of us
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ignore
the importance of issues caused by
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wastes
.
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Some
opine the
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governments
should
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make
it a legal requirement. I completely
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agree
with this statement and I
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
think
that regulations can result earlier than other ways.

Firstly
, the laws will
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
change
the culture during a long period of time.
For example
, in France
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people
were whipped
if did not pass the road by the pedestrian line which caused
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
today
never cross the road wherever they want. Making a law on
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
wastes
will result in paying more attention to actions such as separating the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
recycling
and non-recycling rubbish in homes.

Secondly
, severe acts can
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
prevent
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
from making
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
wastes
if there are any taxes putting on it.
Consequently
, environmental issues such as leaving trashes in the forests or throwing them in the seas will become
Use only "less" (without 'more') when you use the comparative.
more less
. By taxing
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people
will be aware of the
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wastes
they
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make
,
moreover
the revenue can spend for saving the nature.
Besides
, this will
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help
to making
Did you mean "fewer"? The noun wastes is countable.
less
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wastes
which leads to less
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recycling
expenses.

On the other hand
,
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
governments
should provide the basic needs to reach this goal, such as trash cans or
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recycling
factories.
For instance
, if
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
have no place to put their plastics, glasses, and papers
separately
, they blend them.
Therefore
, municipalities
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
must
install suitable equipment for citizens.

In conclusion
, most of the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
are aware of importance of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
recycling
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waste
,
however
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
ignore
this can
be fined
by
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
governments
. Since participating in
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
waste
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
recycling
is not a cultural
Possible spelling mistake. 'behaviour' is British English.
behaviour
, ruling is the best solution to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
change
it immediately.
13Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
20Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
3Mistakes
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IELTS essay Some people claim that not enough of the waste from homes is recycled. They say that the only way to increase recycling is for governments to make it a legal requirement. v. 4

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
279 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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