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Some people claim that not enough of the waste from homes is recycled. They say that the only way to increase recycling is for governments to make it a legal requirement. To what extent do you think laws are needed to make people recycle more of their wast v.18

Some people claim that not enough of the waste from homes is recycled. They say that the only way to increase recycling is for governments to make it a legal requirement. 18
The practice of corporal punishment in educational institutions is decreasing, but it is believed by some to improvise behaviour. I disagree with the view and choose to elaborate on my response. Traditional schooling methods involved punishing the child for any bad behaviour by hitting them. It was supposed to be the most sort remedy, as elders at home would indulge in the same. In a bid to reform the child, and reinforce good manners, physical beating was then considered necessary. For example: If a child refuses to study for an exam, or eat vegetables corporal punishment usually ensured that the task was undertaken. Teachers are considered to be parents in school. Instead of one pupil they handle more than fifty at a time. The only control they have over children, creating a menace is punishment. The reason though is quite simple, punish one child while the others will not repeat the same observing consequences. Although today's society is no longer the same, and methods used in the past cannot be replicated. For example: Classrooms have cameras, and any teacher observed to be Beating a child can be put behind bars. It is important to understand that even though it is crucial to instill good habits from childhood harsh punishment is not the solution. It not only creates a fear of school, but affects the infant’s development in later stages of his career. For example: A student constantly harassed by the teacher tends to be a shy individual as an adult. In conclusion, I disagree that we should continue to use age-old practices, as it does improve behaviour rather causes more harm than good.
The practice of corporal
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in educational institutions is decreasing,
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it
is believed
by
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some
to improvise
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behaviour
. I disagree with the view and choose to elaborate on my response.

Traditional schooling methods involved punishing the
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child
for any
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bad
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behaviour
by hitting them. It
was supposed
to be the most sort remedy, as elders at home would indulge in the same. In a bid to reform the
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child
, and reinforce
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good
manners, physical beating was then considered necessary.
For example
: If a
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child
refuses to study for an exam, or eat vegetables corporal
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punishment
usually
ensured that the task was undertaken. Teachers
are considered
to be parents in school.
Instead
of one pupil they handle more than fifty at a time. The
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only
control they have over children, creating a menace is
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punishment
. The reason though is quite simple, punish one
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child
while the others will not repeat the same observing consequences.

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today
's society is no longer the same, and methods
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used
in the past cannot
be replicated
.
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: Classrooms have cameras, and any teacher observed to
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Beating a
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child
can
be put
behind bars. It is
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important
to understand that
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it is crucial to instill
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good
habits from childhood harsh
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punishment
is not the solution. It not
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only
creates a fear of school,
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but
affects the infant’s development in later stages of his career.
For example
: A student
constantly
harassed by the teacher tends to be a shy individual as an adult.

In conclusion
, I disagree that we should continue to
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use
age-
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practices, as it does
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behaviour
rather
causes more harm than
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IELTS essay Some people claim that not enough of the waste from homes is recycled. They say that the only way to increase recycling is for governments to make it a legal requirement. 18

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
273 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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