People have different views regarding the questions why people turn into crime. Many people believe that crime is a consequence of congenital characteristic of individuals while I agree that social issues and poverty is the main reasons for people commit crime.
On one hand, it is obvious that inborn characteristic might lead people to commit crime in the future due to some factors. Firstly, Living in a violent family can affect negatively children’s behaviour to becoming cruel people which leads them easily turn to criminals in the future. Since having a harsh time at home, children’s classmate or friends might be bullied constantly at school which helps cruel one enjoying happiness. In addition, bad characteristic and lazier people are more likely to become offenders than normal people. This could be because they only want to achieve what they like instead of working hardly to honestly obtain it. In short, this factors could breed future criminal to society if parents can not find a way to address it.
On the other hand, social issues and poverty play a vital role in increasing crime rate in our community. First and foremost, there are many problems of society which push people to become criminal in order to meet their living standard such as low wages, lack of works, unemployment just to name a few. Furthermore, poverty is considered as one of the main reason people tend to commit crime. For example, without being educated, children can not have a bright future and being survive in life, they have to steal food and things from others which is the fastest way to get what they want.
In conclusion, Although innate characteristic is responsible for being crime of people it seems to me that the particular causes of crime are social problem and living under the poverty line.
People
have
different
views regarding the questions why
people
turn into
crime
.
Many
people
believe that
crime
is a consequence of congenital
characteristic
of individuals while I
agree
that social issues and
poverty
is the main reasons for
people
commit crime.
On one hand, it is obvious that inborn
characteristic
might lead
people
to commit
crime
in the
future
due to
some
factors.
Firstly
, Living in a violent family can affect
negatively
children’s
behaviour
to becoming cruel
people
which leads them
easily
turn to criminals in the
future
. Since having a harsh time at home, children’s classmate or friends might
be bullied
constantly
at school which
helps
cruel one enjoying happiness.
In addition
,
bad
characteristic
and lazier
people
are more likely to become offenders than normal
people
. This could be
because
they
only
want to achieve what they like
instead
of working hardly to
honestly
obtain it. In short,
this
factors could breed
future
criminal to society if parents can not find a way to address it.
On the other hand
, social issues and
poverty
play a vital role in increasing
crime
rate in our community.
First
and foremost, there are
many
problems of society which push
people
to become criminal in order to
meet
their living standard such as low wages, lack of works, unemployment
just
to name a few.
Furthermore
,
poverty
is considered
as one of the main reason
people
tend to commit
crime
.
For example
, without
being educated
, children can not have a bright
future
and being
survive
in life, they
have to
steal food and things from others which is the fastest way to
get
what they want.
In conclusion
, Although innate
characteristic
is responsible for being
crime
of
people
it seems to me that the particular causes of
crime
are social problem and living under the
poverty
line.
8Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
30Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
3Mistakes