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Some people believe they should keep all the money they have earned and should not pay tax to the state. Do you agree or disagree? v.2

Some people believe they should keep all the money they have earned and should not pay tax to the state. v. 2
Nowadays, there is a heated debate amongst the citizens that whether they should pay taxes to the government or they should keep their whole earning with them. In my opinion, the people must have to pay tax, which is not only beneficial to an individual but also it would develop the society. To support my view, in favour of imposing taxation to the citizen brings many advantages to the society such as the gap between rich and poor can be faded up to certain extent, every citizen can get good public facilities, which is governed by local authority and monetarily supported by tax payer. Thus, the tax paid by citizen would particularly utilize to provide good infrastructure, health care and education to them. Thus rich and poor both can benefit from such practice and social harmony can be maintained in the society. Hence, the improvement in standard of living of every citizen can be possible with this practice of taxation. Furthermore, the economy of the domestic area can be boost up with the help of tax revenue collected by administration body. The authority would utilize money to create more job opportunities to the local population, as a result more employment will generate and people will get more earning. Also the government can render good quality of standard of living to their citizens. For instance, metro trains for transportation, high-tech laboratories and libraries for research, good hospitals and education institutes to mould next generation with bright future. In conclusion, taxation is the most essential practice to develop any nation. The government should conduct awareness campaign to the public so they can understand the importance of their contribution to the development of their nation and society.
Nowadays, there is a heated debate amongst the
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citizens
that whether they should pay
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taxes
to the
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government or
they should
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keep
their whole earning with them. In my opinion, the
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people
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must
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have to
pay
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tax
, which is not
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only
beneficial to an individual
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but
also
it would develop the society.

To support my view, in
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favour
of imposing taxation to the
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citizen
brings
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many
advantages to the society such as the gap between rich and poor can
be faded
up to certain extent, every
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citizen
can
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get
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good
public facilities, which
is governed
by local authority and
monetarily
supported by
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tax
payer.
Thus
, the
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tax
paid by
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citizen
would
particularly
utilize to provide
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good
infrastructure, health care and education to them.
Thus
rich and poor both can benefit from such practice and social harmony can
be maintained
in the society.
Hence
, the improvement in standard of living of every
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citizen
can be possible with this practice of taxation.

Furthermore
, the economy of the domestic area can be boost up with the
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help
of
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tax
revenue collected by administration body. The authority would utilize money to create more job opportunities to the local population,
as a result
more employment will generate and
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people
will
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get
more earning.
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Also
the
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government
can render
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good
quality of standard of living to their
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citizens
.
For instance
, metro trains for transportation, high-tech laboratories and libraries for research,
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good
hospitals and education institutes to
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mould
next
generation with bright future.

In conclusion
, taxation is the most essential practice to develop any nation. The
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
government
should conduct awareness campaign to the public
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so
they can understand the importance of their contribution to the development of their nation and society.
12Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
15Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
5Mistakes
Change your language and you change your thoughts.
Karl Albrecht

IELTS essay Some people believe they should keep all the money they have earned and should not pay tax to the state. v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
284 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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Lexical Resource: 5.0
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