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Some people believe that university students should pay all the cost of studies because university education only benefit the students themselves not the society as a whole. To what extent do you agree or disagree? v.3

Some people believe that university students should pay all the cost of studies because university education only benefit the students themselves not the society as a whole. v. 3
There is a controversial notion that students attending university should pay tuition fees by themselves as it is only personal benefits. Although I understand this point of veiw, I would argue that government should support university students for notional growth. Ademittedly, there are some disadvantages to supporting university students. To begin with, some people might insist that it is a burden to investing a government's budgets in encouraging many pupils to attend high education institution. This is because if the governments give many benefits to unviversity students, some people who do not need to go to the unversity are likely to apply school for a only high status. In addition, this situation might lead them to losing their enough time to think what they want to be and to explore some adventures for their future. As a result, this could have harmful effects on both individuals and society. However, I still believe that supporting university students can bring about many positive consequences. The increasing number of undergraduates is not only beneficial for individuals but also for society. For example, well-educated people improve their ability to compete with others in university, abtaining professional knowledge. Due to a intense competitiveness, being graduated from university has become necessary facter for employment. Therefore, these intellignet people can cause a national development in many ways, helping companies winning in global competition. In conclusion, according to aforementioned reasons, I understand some drawbacks of helping university students financially, I still belive that this should be seen as a positive development for both individuals and society.
There is a controversial notion that
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students
attending
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university
should pay tuition fees by themselves as it is
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only
personal benefits. Although I understand this point of
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veiw
, I would argue that
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government
should support
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university
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students
for notional growth.

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Ademittedly
, there are
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some
disadvantages to supporting
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university
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students
. To
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begin
with,
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some
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people
might insist that it is a burden to investing a
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government
's budgets in encouraging
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many
pupils to attend high education institution. This is
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because
if the
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governments
give
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many
benefits to
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unviversity
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students
,
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some
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people
who do not need to go to the
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unversity
are likely to apply school for
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a
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only
high status.
In addition
, this situation might lead them to losing their
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enough
time to
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think
what they want to be and to explore
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some
adventures for their future.
As a result
, this could have harmful effects on both individuals and society.

However
, I
still
believe that supporting
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university
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students
can bring about
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many
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positive
consequences. The increasing number of undergraduates is not
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only
beneficial for individuals
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but
also
for society.
For example
, well-educated
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people
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improve
their ability to compete with others in
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university
,
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abtaining
professional knowledge. Due to
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a
intense competitiveness,
being graduated
from
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university
has become necessary
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facter
for employment.
Therefore
, these
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intellignet
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people
can cause a national development in
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many
ways, helping
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companies
winning in global competition.

In conclusion
, according to aforementioned reasons, I understand
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some
drawbacks of helping
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university
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students
financially
, I
still
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belive
that this should be
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seen
as a
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positive
development for both individuals and society.
13Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
17Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
10Mistakes

IELTS essay Some people believe that university students should pay all the cost of studies because university education only benefit the students themselves not the society as a whole. v. 3

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
258 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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