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Some people believe that there should be fixed punishments for each type of crime, and the motivation for commiting it, should always be taken into account when deciding on the punishment. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion v.1

Some people believe that there should be fixed punishments for each type of crime, and the motivation for commiting it, should always be taken into account when deciding on the punishment. 1
Some people think murderers need strong punishments without not hear their reasons, but somebody says we must listen murderers reasons why they did this crime. For introduction I will talk about addition to my own point of view. I rely on both these are true, we arouse on some options and fixed punishments on some situations. Additionally I can say judges sometimes decide false decisions. First of all I prop both these ideas. Why punishments are available? As the majority of shame bodies are in prison, but a minority of gangsters are free right now. Because expert sometimes decide false decisions and pick their free life. Although the court must motivate to poverty-stricken population, but she or he does not motivate, unlike he or she changes indigent free people to brutal and stupid collective. Likewise referee need to think, but he or she does not think. İs it a gorgeous world of worthless? Unfortunately, it is a lack and dreadful for them. Must they live in darkness without their families? ? İs it's true if they do not have guilts? Then? Everything will be horrible for them, especially their sons or daughters. Then. . . . Furthermore, something will change in the their world specially their family's connections and this is awful. Maybe they will think everything would be dreaded but this is so. . . Also they can invective to court, I know it is not fabulous option but they can do. . I am thinking, learning true matter is so difficult or it is even impossible for people. Maybe the monsters will say false ideas or maybe they have burdensome considerations. İndubitable everything is not so homey for slayers say their criminal events. Necessary point is assassins must talk true options to people, but they do not say sometimes right situations to people in this privilege when policemen arrest them and undeniably creamers do not oration rightfulness situations to collectively. İndisputable they need to listen by community the same choice when done not decide by judges and she/he does not go to prison yet. For instance, there is a human lived jail without guilts approximately 46 years and unfortunately this human's young time passes from his life, well they gave 10 million dollars to him but this is not way out on this opportunity. In addition to 10 million dollars, do not give to the pure peoples' backgrounds and it is terribly tense to the shame humans. İ think it is the worst situation. İf we do not want them to happen, we must motivate each-other nonetheless we try to be charitable. And therefore the judges must decide truest decisions for tempers maybe they are not cut-throat maybe they are naive. Judges must decide truest decisions for killers and population otherwise executioners have some deals to die. And the same choice ruler must motivate to killers, because of fear. So enforcers have dread and everybody try to calm them the same time and then if they are cosy they start to say accurately. These are my own point of views and I think these ideas are true in this modern world. İn conclusion I can say all of us try to decide true decisions like judges when the person is liquidated, must be motivated sometimes and fixed punishments often.
Some
people
think
murderers need strong
punishments
without not hear their reasons,
but
somebody says we
must
listen murderers reasons why they did this crime.

For
introduction I
will talk about addition to my
own
point of view. I rely on both these are
true
, we arouse on
some
options and
fixed
punishments
on
some
situations
.
Additionally
I can say
judges
sometimes
decide
false
decisions
.
First of all
I prop both these
ideas
. Why
punishments
are available? As the majority of shame bodies are in prison,
but
a minority of gangsters are free right
now
.
Because
expert
sometimes
decide
false
decisions
and pick their free life. Although the court
must
motivate
to poverty-stricken population,
but
she or he does not
motivate
, unlike he or she
changes
indigent free
people
to brutal and stupid collective.
Likewise
referee need to
think
,
but
he or she does not
think
.
İs
it a gorgeous world of worthless? Unfortunately, it is a lack and dreadful for them. M
ust
they l
ive
in darkness without their families? ?
İs
it's
true
if they do not have
guilts
? Then? Everything will be horrible for them, es
pecially t
heir sons or daughters. Then.
.
.
.
Fu
rthermore,
something will ch
ange i
n
the their world
specially
their family's connections and this is awful. Maybe they will th
ink e
verything would
be dreaded
bu
t t
his is so
.
.
.
Al
so t
hey
can invective
to court, I know it is not fabulous option bu
t t
hey can do.
.


I am thinking, learning
true
matter is so
d
ifficult or it is even impossible for pe
ople.
Maybe the monsters will say false id
eas o
r maybe they have burdensome considerations.
İndubitable
everything is not so
ho
mey for slayers say their criminal eve
nts. N
ecessary point is assassins mus
t ta
lk
true
options to peo
ple, b
ut
th
ey do not say som
etimes ri
ght
situations
to peo
ple in
this privilege when policemen arrest them and
undeniably
creamers do not oration rightfulness
situations
to
collectively
.
İndisputable
they need to listen by community the same choice when done not
decide
by
judges and
she/he does not go to prison yet.
Fo
r
instance, th
ere is a human live
d jai
l without
guilts
approximately 46 years and unfortunately this
human's young
time passes from his life, well they gave 10 million dollars to him but
thi
s is not way out on this opportunity. In a
ddition to
10 million dollars, do not give to the pure peoples' backgrounds and it is
terribly
tense to the shame humans. İ
think
it i
s the worst
situation
.
İf
we do not want them to happen, we must m
otiv
ate each-other nonetheless we try to be charitable. And therefore the
judges
must d
ecid
e
truest
decisions
for tempers maybe they are not cut-th
roa
t maybe they are naive.
Judges
must d
ecid
e
truest
decisions
for killers and population otherw
ise execu
tioners have some d
eals
to die. A
nd
the same choice ruler must m
otiv
ate to killers, becaus
e of fe
ar. So enf
or
cers have dread and everybody
try
to calm them the same time and then if they are
cosy
they start
to sa
y
accurately
. These are my own po
int
of views and I
think
these
ideas are
true
in this modern world.

İn
conclusion I
can say all of us try to
decide
true
decisions
like
judges
when the person
is liquidated
, must be
mot
ivated sometim
es and fi
xed p
unish
ments often.
12Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
49Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
31Mistakes

IELTS essay Some people believe that there should be fixed punishments for each type of crime, and the motivation for commiting it, should always be taken into account when deciding on the punishment. 1

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