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Scientists have been warning for many years already that to protect environment people should use less energy. However, most people do not change their way of living. What is causing this behaviour? How can people be encouraged to change? Give your explanations using relevant examples from your experience. v.1

Scientists have been warning for many years already that to protect environment people should use less energy. However, most people do not change their way of living. What is causing this behaviour? How can people be encouraged to change? Give your explanations using relevant examples from your experience. v. 1
The environment has been altered due to usage of considerable energy, most of people still not taking care of this issue after several advice from scientists. Ignorance on highly consumed power leads the world into danger. Proper precautions and awareness to the users makes considerable changes in environment. People reluctant to compromise their way of living, which compel the society for usage of high consumption of energy. The more you use power, more you create polluting elements to the world. During the power consumption leads nitrogen, carbon-di-oxide and other highly hazardous vapours does huge damage to the environment such as global warming, Ozone hole and acid rains. Global warming increases the temperature of the earth, results the rise in sea level. Also, produced vapours damage the ozone layer results acid rain and greenhouse effect. Already entire world was facing the problem of the rise in sea level. The Government has to initiate the programs such as introducing the circumstances of high energy consumptions in academics, taking some awareness programs by conducting programs like making mandatory programs in work places to raise their voice on pollution levels soon. In addition to that enforcement helps the government in reducing the power consumption by allowing few motor vehicles in a day manner. Now a day, imposing lock-down giving better results identified in many countries. In conclusion, highly consumed power making the world hazardous. The highly used power damages the environment by creating global warming, Ozone hole, green house effect and acid rains. Proper precautions and awareness to the people results considerable change in environment conditions.
The
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environment
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been altered
due to usage of considerable energy, most of
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people
still
not taking care of this issue after
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several advice
from scientists. Ignorance on
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highly
consumed
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power
leads the
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world
into
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danger
. Proper precautions and awareness to the users
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makes
considerable
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changes
in environment.

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People
reluctant to compromise their way of living, which compel the society for usage of high
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consumption
of energy. The more you
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use
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power
, more you create polluting elements to the
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world
. During the
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power
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consumption
leads nitrogen,
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carbon-di-oxide
and other
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highly
hazardous
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vapours
does huge damage to the
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environment
such as global warming, Ozone hole and acid rains. Global warming increases the temperature of the earth,
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results
the rise in sea level.
Also
, produced
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vapours
damage the ozone layer
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results
acid rain and greenhouse effect. Already entire
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world
was facing the problem of the rise in sea level.

The
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Government
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has to
initiate the
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programs
such as introducing the circumstances of high energy
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consumptions
in academics, taking
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some
awareness
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programs
by conducting
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programs
like making mandatory
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programs
in work places to raise their voice on pollution levels
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soon
.
In addition
to that enforcement
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helps
the
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government
in reducing the
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power
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consumption
by allowing few motor vehicles in a day manner.
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Now
a day, imposing lock-down giving better
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results
identified in
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many
countries.

In conclusion
,
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highly
consumed
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power
making the
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world
hazardous. The
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highly
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used
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power
damages the
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environment
by creating global warming, Ozone hole, green
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house
effect and acid rains. Proper precautions and awareness to the
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people
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results
considerable
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change
in
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environment
conditions.
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IELTS essay Scientists have been warning for many years already that to protect environment people should use less energy. However, most people do not change their way of living. What is causing this behaviour? How can people be encouraged to change? Give your explanations using relevant examples from your experience. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
262 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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