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Countries are becoming more and more similar because people are able to buy the same products anywhere in the world. Do you think this is a positive or negative development? v.20

Countries are becoming more and more similar because people are able to buy the same products anywhere in the world. Do you think this is a positive or negative development? v. 20
Nowadays, all the countries are becoming very similar due to the availability of products anywhere and everywhere, and the people are able to buy them without any discomfort. Moreover, I believe that this is a positive development, because it helps the public to get any items without any discomfort. Firstly, with the development of technology, the things that were impossible in the past has become possible. Indeed, this is factual because, because in the past, people had either unheard or just got to know about the pizzas, burgers and continental foods, which is famous in a particular place, but now everybody can eat these dishes without any discomforts. For instance, my friend who is studying in Portugal, once told me that she had eaten something named “Vindaloo” which is a meat curry and that its taste was amazing. Moreover, I wanted to try this dish, so when I searched for restaurants that can deliver this curry, to my surprise I found more than 20 restaurants, where this is cooked and delivered. Finally, when I got it, I took a picture of it and sent to her stating that it is also available in India and that I am having it. Secondly, because of the development, many fruits, vegetables, electronics besides these cosmetics which are of international brands are easily available, which adds a positive impact to the society. For example, the Revlon product which is a famous American branded cosmetic is now obtainable in India and many people who like this brand are able to buy it easily. Furthermore, due to the exporting of a country’s artefact to another, there will be exchanging of items and it is a way of maintaining a healthy relationship with neighbouring nations. In conclusion, according to me, since all the artefacts are easily obtainable, even though there may be pitfalls, but still its advantages outweigh them. Moreover, I wish this continues even in the future, so that the whole world stays together by demolishing the barriers among the nations.
Nowadays, all the countries are becoming
very
similar due to the availability of products anywhere and everywhere, and the
people
are able to
buy
them without any discomfort.
Moreover
, I believe that this is a
positive
development,
because
it
helps
the public to
get
any items without any discomfort.

Firstly
, with the development of technology, the things that were impossible in the past has become possible.
Indeed
, this is factual
because
,
because
in the past,
people
had either unheard or
just
got
to know about the pizzas, burgers and continental foods, which is
famous
in a particular place,
but
now
everybody can eat these dishes without any discomforts.
For instance
, my friend who is studying in Portugal, once
told
me that she had eaten something named “
Vindaloo
” which is a meat curry and that its taste was amazing.
Moreover
, I wanted to try this dish,
so
when I searched for restaurants that can deliver this curry, to my surprise I found more than 20 restaurants, where this
is cooked
and delivered.
Finally
, when I
got
it, I took a picture of it and
sent
to her stating that it is
also
available in India and that I am having it.

Secondly
,
because
of the development,
many
fruits, vegetables, electronics
besides
these cosmetics which are of international brands are
easily
available, which
adds
a
positive
impact to the society.
For example
, the Revlon product which is a
famous
American branded
cosmetic is
now
obtainable in India and
many
people
who like this brand are able to
buy
it
easily
.
Furthermore
, due to the exporting of a country’s
artefact
to another, there will be exchanging of items and it is a way of maintaining a healthy relationship with
neighbouring
nations.

In conclusion
, according to me, since all the
artefacts
are
easily
obtainable,
even though
there may be pitfalls,
but
still
its advantages outweigh them.
Moreover
, I wish this continues even in the future,
so
that the whole world stays together by demolishing the barriers among the nations.
8.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
8.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay Countries are becoming more and more similar because people are able to buy the same products anywhere in the world. Do you think this is a positive or negative development? v. 20

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