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Some people believe that universities should focus their money on academic studies. Other people believe that university should also use their funds to provide students with entertainments such as movies and concerts. What's your opinion and why? v.1

Some people believe that universities should focus their money on academic studies. Other people believe that university should also use their funds to provide students with entertainments such as movies and concerts. What's your opinion and why? v. 1
Fresh water has become scarce in some part of the globe in recent times. The increased need has become a worldwide challenge. This essay will discuss the cause of water shortage to be increased in the growing population, and its solution are provision of good sources of water by the government and avoidance of water wastage by individuals. Overpopulation has caused increase water usage, leading to its unavailability. The number of people increases by the day as new offspring are birthed daily, amounting to an upshot in the populace. The need of water is essential as human uses it in carrying out domestic activities like washing clothes, Also human consumption accounts for a larger quantity in addition to industrial and agricultural use. Since its usefulness cannot be over emphasized, it is glaring that as the number of living beings has risen, the amount being utilized will definitely rise leading to its insufficiency. For example, a report showing the effect of drought in Australia, stated that the effect would not have been significant if not for the addition of the immigrants that has eventually added to the number of dwellers. Provision of potable water by the government and individuals proper utilization will be a suitable solution to a limited quantity of water. Government should ensure that each state has a water board that supplies water constantly to the inhabitant of such areas. Ensuring that the employers are diligent in carrying out their assigned duty, monitoring and getting a feedback on the success or short comes of their activities. Also, people utilizing it should avoid wastage and use the available quantity judiciously to prevent its scarcity. For instance, a result of a study reported that about 60% of water is being wasted by humans on a daily basis without being used for something beneficial. However, if conserved will prevent shortages. In conclusion, the significant rise in the number of living people has lead to lack of water, and this can be sorted out by inculcating both government and individual input. It is therefore recommended that prompt attention should be paid to the need of water before it becomes a devastating condition.
Fresh
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water
has become scarce in
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some
part of the globe in recent times. The increased need has become a worldwide challenge. This essay will discuss the cause of
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water
shortage to
be increased
in the growing population, and its solution are provision of
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good
sources of
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water
by the
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government
and avoidance of
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water
wastage by individuals.

Overpopulation has caused increase
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water
usage, leading to its unavailability. The
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number
of
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people
increases by the day as new offspring
are birthed
daily, amounting to an upshot in the populace. The need of
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water
is essential as human
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uses
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it in carrying
out domestic activities like washing clothes,
Also
human consumption accounts for a larger quantity
in addition
to industrial and agricultural
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use
. Since its usefulness cannot be over emphasized, it is glaring that as the
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number
of living beings has risen, the amount
being utilized
will definitely rise leading to its insufficiency.
For example
, a report showing the effect of drought in Australia, stated that the effect would not have been significant if not for the addition of the immigrants that has
eventually
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added
to the
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number
of dwellers.

Provision of potable
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water
by the
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government
and individuals proper utilization will be a suitable solution to a limited quantity of
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water
.
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Government
should ensure that each state has a
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water
board that supplies
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water
constantly
to the inhabitant of such areas. Ensuring that the employers are diligent in carrying out their assigned duty, monitoring and getting a feedback on the success or short
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comes
of their activities.
Also
,
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people
utilizing it should avoid wastage and
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use
the available quantity
judiciously
to
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prevent
its scarcity.
For instance
, a result of a study reported that about 60% of
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water
is
being wasted
by humans on a daily basis without being
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
used
for something beneficial.
However
, if conserved will
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prevent
shortages.

In conclusion
, the significant rise in the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
number
of living
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
has lead to lack of
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water
, and this can
be sorted
out by inculcating both
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government
and individual input. It is
therefore
recommended that prompt attention should
be paid
to the need of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
water
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
before
it becomes a devastating condition.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes

IELTS essay Some people believe that universities should focus their money on academic studies. Other people believe that university should also use their funds to provide students with entertainments such as movies and concerts. What's your opinion and why? v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
359 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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