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Some people believe that to improve driving standards it is better for drivers to take road safety courses; others think that strict punishment is more effective. Discuss both views and give your own opinion. v.1

Some people believe that to improve driving standards it is better for drivers to take road safety courses; others think that strict punishment is more effective. v. 1
Nowadays people believe that it is important to spend an amount of money on building new railway lines for new fast trains between cities. While others think that this money should spend it on developing and improving the current public transport. This essay will discuss both sides and draw my personal conclusion. In one hand constructing a new way of transporting between cities will encourage the tourists to use this new train. For instance, many people of the world have been in Japan just to use this popular fast train and that increased the rate of tourists. And when more tourists visit a country more money come to this country. So that is how building new trains ways can be a good example of the rise the economy. On the other hand, focusing on the existing pubic transports can make the people to use it, whether than using the cars, so that has a lot of benefits. Firstly, it can solve the traffic problems and that will be better for the nature. To illustrate people in the Netherlands using a public transport more than their own cars and motorcycles. Secondly, that made the movement in the cites easier and faster. And that is because a lot of money has been spent on the transports. In conclusion, after a careful analysis of both views. I believe that if the governments has a good financial status the should spend on the two projects, but what I think is better that they should spend more money on the public transports because it reducing environmental pollution.
Nowadays
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on building
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new
railway lines for
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fast
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trains
between cities. While others
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money
should
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spend
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current
public
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transport
. This essay will discuss both sides and draw my personal conclusion.

In one hand constructing a
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new
way of transporting between cities will encourage the tourists to
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use
this
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new
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train
.
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many
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people
of the world have been in Japan
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use
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fast
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train
and that increased the rate of tourists. And when more tourists visit a country more
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money
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come
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new
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trains
ways can be a
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example of the rise the economy.

On the other hand
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pubic
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transports
can
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use
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people
in the Netherlands using a public
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transport
more than their
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own
cars and motorcycles.
Secondly
, that made the movement in the cites easier and faster. And
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on the transports.

In conclusion
, after a careful analysis of both views. I believe that if the
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governments
has a
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financial status
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the
should
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spend
on the two projects,
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is better that they should
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IELTS essay Some people believe that to improve driving standards it is better for drivers to take road safety courses; others think that strict punishment is more effective. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
262 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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