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Some people believe that to become successful at a sport requires a natural ability, others think that hardwork and practice are more important. Discuss both views and give your opinion v.1

Some people believe that to become successful at a sport requires a natural ability, others think that hardwork and practice are more important. 1
There is no doubt that being successful is important in today's world. It is argued by some people that becoming successful at sport depends on having an innate ability. However, others believe that hard work and training is more significant. In my opinion, I feel that hard work and practice is necessary to becoming succesful in sport. On the one hand, there are people who think that having an innate ability rather than hard work and practice will result to achieving success in sport. This is because if you have a natural ability, you will become creative. For instance, according to some athletes, they claim that having a creative skill helped them to become famous in their career. Furthermore, if a player has a natural skill, it will help the person to spend less time in practice and spend those hours in other areas. On the other hand, some people believe that hard work and training rather than innate skill will help people become successful in sport and I agree. This is because if people practise, then they can attain perfection. Take for example, Mohammed Ali, he trained for several hours, every day in a week. This made him disciplined and he became the most successful boxer in his era. Furthermore, hard work and practice help people to become mentally alert which is needed for being a successful player. In conclusion, although people believe that becoming successful in sport depends on natural ability. I opine that hard work and training are more significant to becoming a successful sportsman.
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is
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important
in
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today
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is argued
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some
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people
that becoming
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successful
at
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sport
depends on having an innate
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ability
.
However
, others believe that
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hard
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work
and training is more significant. In my opinion, I feel that
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hard
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work
and
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practice
is necessary to becoming
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succesful
in sport.

On the one hand, there are
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people
who
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think
that having an innate
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ability
rather
than
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hard
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work
and
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practice
will result to achieving success in
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sport
. This is
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because
if you have a natural
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ability
, you will
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become
creative.
For instance
, according to
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some
athletes, they claim that having a creative
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skill
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helped
them to
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become
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famous
in their career.
Furthermore
, if a player has a natural
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skill
, it will
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help
the person to spend less time in
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practice
and spend those hours in other areas.

On the other hand
,
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some
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people
believe that
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hard
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work
and training
rather
than innate
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skill
will
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help
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people
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become
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successful
in
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sport
and I
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agree
. This is
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if
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people
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practise
, then they can attain perfection. Take
for example
, Mohammed Ali, he trained for several hours, every day in a week. This made him
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disciplined and
he became the most
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successful
boxer in his era.
Furthermore
,
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hard
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work
and
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practice
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help
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people
to
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become
mentally alert which
is needed
for being a
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successful
player.

In conclusion
, although
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people
believe that becoming
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successful
in
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sport
depends on natural
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ability
. I opine that
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hard
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work
and training are more significant to becoming a
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successful
sportsman.
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IELTS essay Some people believe that to become successful at a sport requires a natural ability, others think that hardwork and practice are more important. 1

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258 words
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