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Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Grades (marks) encourage students to learn. Use specific reasons and examples to support your opinion v.258

Grades (marks) encourage students to learn. Use specific reasons and examples to support your opinion v. 258
It is believed that employers should see personal attributes instead of the qualification and experience of the candidates while hiring them. In my opinion, personal skills are more important in sales job while degree and experience matters the most in the professional jobs. On the one hand, I believe that the basic qualities like having healthy conversations, power to convince and so on are inbuilt in any human being and cannot be taught in any school or college. Text-books can only teach the theory, but basic characteristics are possessed by the person by birth. For instance, qualities required in a sales person are patience and willingness to sell any product. Books can teach only the basic of sales, however, it is the individual who convinces and sells the product using his interpersonal skills which are difficult to see in people holding degrees. On the other hand, I would say that there are some professions where the degree is more significant than skills. A person is unable to become a professional until he does not know the basic concepts of that field. For example, an individual cannot become a lawyer just because he is good at arguing. A professional degree is required where all the articles, sections and various real time cases are taught and explained. In conclusion, according to me, recruiters should see the qualities and experience in the candidate depending upon the position they are hiring for. If a salesman is required, personal skills are more valuable and if the vacancy is for any professional, they should focus more on the education and experience.
It
is believed
that employers should
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
see
personal attributes
instead
of the qualification and
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
experience
of the candidates while hiring them. In my opinion, personal
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
skills
are more
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
important
in sales job while degree and
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
experience
matters the most in the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
professional
jobs.

On the one hand, I believe that the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
basic
qualities like having healthy conversations, power to convince and
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
so
on are inbuilt in any human being and cannot
be taught
in any school or college. Text-books can
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
only
teach the theory,
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
but
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
basic
characteristics
are possessed
by the person by birth.
For instance
, qualities required in a sales person are patience and willingness to sell any product. Books can teach
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
only
the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
basic
of sales,
however
, it is the individual who convinces and sells the product using his interpersonal
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
skills
which are difficult to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
see
in
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
holding degrees.

On the other hand
, I would say that there are
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
professions where the degree is more significant than
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
skills
. A person is unable to become a
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
professional
until he does not know the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
basic
concepts of that field.
For example
, an individual cannot become a lawyer
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
just
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
because
he is
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
good
at arguing. A
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
professional
degree
is required
where all the articles, sections and various real time cases
are taught
and
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
explained
.

In conclusion
, according to me, recruiters should
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
see
the qualities and
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
experience
in the candidate depending upon the position they are hiring for. If a salesman
is required
, personal
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
skills
are more valuable and if the vacancy is for any
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
professional
, they should focus more on the education and
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
experience
.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes

IELTS essay Grades (marks) encourage students to learn. Use specific reasons and examples to support your opinion v. 258

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
265 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
  • ?
    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
Labels Descriptions
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  • Meet the criteria
  • Doesn't meet the criteria
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