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Some people believe that those who are not talented in language learning should not required to learn a second language What is your opinion v.2

Some people believe that those who are not talented in language learning should not required to learn a second language What is your opinion v. 2
In this day and age, an increasing number of people are learning a second language for various purposes. However, it has been suggested that receiving a foreign language lesson might only apply to those who are gifted. From my perspective, I tend to disagree with this statement, although the opposite view needs to be closely considered as well. On one hand, language learning is a long term process that requires years of practising in junction with tenacity for the majority, with the exception of those geniuses. Time allows learners to grasp skills and knowledge gradually as well as correct their mistakes. By making efforts, most students may be able to make a big achievement, since practise makes perfect. However, if one was born with a gifted language advantage but holding back on his/her nurture studying, the results may turn out dissatisfactory. In addition, the advanced technology is easing the studying process, creating more effective methods for the most. For example, students can mimic the presentation they have watched on the Internet and improve their grammar by using the word processors. Therefore, those people who say only the talented should learn a second language are going too far. On the other hand, students without natural language skills would confront with several obstacles. The first issue comes down to their biological features which restrain them from pronouncing a word as excellent as others or even genius. No matter how hard they try, the results might be held the same, which would be inevitably under one' s confident. In addition, it would be time-consuming and energy consuming if they keep learning. In conclusion, I believe that learning a second language should not be confined to those are talented, because hard-work and modern technology allows everyone to learn what they want to learn, although this approach is time consuming and may not be paid-off.
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people
are learning a second
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language
for various purposes.
However
, it has
been suggested
that receiving a foreign
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language
lesson might
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only
apply to those who
are gifted
. From my perspective, I tend to disagree with this statement, although the opposite view needs to be
closely
considered
as well
.

On one hand,
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language
learning is a long term process that requires years of
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practising
in junction with tenacity for the majority,
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with the exception of
those geniuses. Time
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allows
learners to grasp
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skills
and knowledge
gradually
as well
as correct their mistakes. By making efforts, most students may be able to
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make
a
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big
achievement, since
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practise
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makes
perfect.
However
, if one
was born
with a gifted
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language
advantage
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but
holding back on his/her nurture studying, the results may turn out
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dissatisfactory
.
In addition
, the advanced technology is easing the studying process, creating more effective methods for the most.
For example
, students can mimic the presentation they have
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watched
on the Internet and
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improve
their grammar by using the word processors.
Therefore
, those
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people
who say
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only
the talented should learn a second
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language
are going too far.

On the other hand
, students without natural
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language
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skills
would confront with several obstacles. The
first
issue
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comes
down to their biological features which restrain them from pronouncing a word as excellent as others or even genius. No matter how
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hard
they try, the results might
be held
the same, which would be
inevitably
under
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one&
#039; s confident.
In addition
, it would be time-consuming and energy consuming if they
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keep
learning.

In conclusion
, I believe that learning a second
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language
should not
be confined
to those
are talented
,
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because
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hard
-work and modern technology
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allows
everyone to learn what they want to learn, although this approach is
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time consuming
and may not
be paid
-off.
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7Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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One language sets you in a corridor for life. Two languages open every door along the way.
Frank Smith

IELTS essay Some people believe that those who are not talented in language learning should not required to learn a second language What is your opinion v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
310 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
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Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
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  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
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Task Achievement: 6.0
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    Present relevant ideas
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