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Some people believe that there should be fixed punishment for each crime. others, however, argue that the circumstances of an individual crime, and the motivation for committing it should always be taken into account when deciding on the punishment. Discuss both these views and give your opinion. v.3

Some people believe that there should be fixed punishment for each crime. others, however, argue that the circumstances of an individual crime, and the motivation for committing it should always be taken into account when deciding on the punishment. v. 3
Unfortunately, people commit crimes every day. Each country has developed the rules for handling it. Usually these rules depend on the past of the person and context around a crime. Let's try to discuss whether is good or not to have a non strict rules for making the final judgment. We can't stress enough that removing context from final decision obviously will make every situation more simple. After that, all rules will be transformed to simple mapping between the crime and the punishment. On the one side, it will help to make judgements faster and decrease the error rate of wrong decisions. On the other side, decisions will become more crude and mean for most of the people. The context is important to make the right decision. I will try to describe one situation to show that. Let's imagine that you are a tourist trying to buy a bus ticket in the country with a different language. Because of the lack of language you ended up with the wrong type of document for travelling. It would be non fair to treat you as native speaker who is doing the same crime on the regular basis. I think we should always consider the circumstances when we are making the final decisions. We can not equally judge people who have done the crime by mistake. In conclusion, we can see that the context of committing crime can radically change the severity of person in society. And if look at present experience of many different countries we can see that the context of committing crimes is important.
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people
commit
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crimes
every day.

Each country has developed the
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rules
for handling it.

Usually
these
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rules
depend on the past of the person and
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context
around a crime.

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's try to discuss whether is
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good
or not to have a
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non strict
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rules
for making the final judgment.

We can't
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stress
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enough
that removing
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context
from final decision
obviously
will
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make
every situation more simple.

After that, all
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rules
will
be transformed
to simple mapping between the
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crime
and the punishment.

On the one side, it will
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help
to
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make
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judgements
faster and decrease the error rate of
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wrong
decisions.

On the other side, decisions will become more crude and mean for most of the
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people
.

The
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context
is
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important
to
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make
the right decision.

I will try to
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describe
one situation to
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show
that.

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Let
's imagine that you are a tourist trying to
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buy
a bus ticket in the country with a
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different
language.

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Because
of the lack of language you ended up with the
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wrong
type of document for travelling.

It would be non
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fair
to treat you as native speaker who is doing the same
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crime
on the regular basis.

I
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think
we should always consider the circumstances when we are making the final decisions. We can not
equally
judge
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people
who have done the
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crime
by mistake.

In conclusion
, we can
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see
that the
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context
of committing
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crime
can
radically
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change
the severity of person in society. And if look at present experience of
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many
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different
countries we can
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see
that the
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context
of committing
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crimes
is
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important
.
3Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
15Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
4Mistakes

IELTS essay Some people believe that there should be fixed punishment for each crime. others, however, argue that the circumstances of an individual crime, and the motivation for committing it should always be taken into account when deciding on the punishment. v. 3

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264 words
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