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Some people believe that to protect local culture, tourism should be banned in some areas whereas others think that change is inevitable and banning tourism will have no benefits. Discuss both sides and give your opinion. v.2

Some people believe that to protect local culture, tourism should be banned in some areas whereas others think that change is inevitable and banning tourism will have no benefits. v. 2
Nowadays, a group of people think that to conserve native culture, should be prohibited in some places while some people believe that alternation is unavoidable and banned tourism will have no profit. In my opinion travel should not to forbidden since it is benefits outweigh drawbacks. On one side of the argument, there are various reasons why some people think that tourism should be prevented. Firstly, it can be clearly seen that one of the most significant factors is environmental damage. Moreover, actually detrimental effect tourism, which results in the contamination in these sites. Secondly, other factors which must be considered is culturally traditional. Furthermore, visiting these areas of travel can change custom and native language. Thirdly, citizens living around attractions probably are disturbed by traveler who would make a noise as well as litter garbage on the road. Despite the above arguments, I am of the view that it is a positive method if we allow the people visiting these areas it comes with multitude advantages. Nevertheless, recent research has shown that in the tourism season travel industry can help local economy for these places. In other words, it means that tourism can provide financial problems and also make job opportunities for citizens of these areas. For instance, hotels, restaurants, ticket for historic places. It ascertains why tourism becomes truly instrumental in the state and community. In conclusion, although preventing the tourism can eliminate pollution and difference tradition. I personally believe that tourism can improvement economy problems and make a profit.
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people
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think
that to conserve native culture, should
be prohibited
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some
places while
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some
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people
believe that alternation is unavoidable and banned
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tourism
will have no profit. In my opinion travel should not to forbidden since it is benefits outweigh drawbacks.

On one side of the argument, there are various reasons why
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some
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people
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think
that
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tourism
should be
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prevented
.
Firstly
, it can be
clearly
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seen
that one of the most significant factors is environmental damage.
Moreover
, actually detrimental effect
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tourism
, which results in the contamination in these sites.
Secondly
, other factors which
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must
be considered
is
culturally
traditional.
Furthermore
, visiting these areas of travel can
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
change
custom and native language.
Thirdly
, citizens living around attractions
probably
are disturbed
by traveler who would
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
make
a noise
as well
as litter garbage on the road.

Despite the above arguments, I am of the view that it is a
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positive
method if we
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allow
the
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people
visiting these areas it
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
comes
with multitude advantages.
Nevertheless
, recent research has shown that in the
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tourism
season travel industry can
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
help
local economy for these places.
In other words
, it means that
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
tourism
can provide financial problems and
also
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
make
job opportunities for citizens of these areas.
For instance
, hotels, restaurants, ticket for historic places. It ascertains why
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
tourism
becomes
truly
instrumental in the state and community.

In conclusion
, although preventing the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
tourism
can eliminate pollution and difference tradition. I
personally
believe that
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
tourism
can improvement economy problems and
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
make
a profit.
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12Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay Some people believe that to protect local culture, tourism should be banned in some areas whereas others think that change is inevitable and banning tourism will have no benefits. v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
252 words
6.5
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