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Some people believe that there should be a fixed punishment for each type of crime. Others, however, argue that the circumstances of an individual crime, and the motivation for committing it, should always be taken into account when deciding on the punishment. v.14

Some people believe that there should be a fixed punishment for each type of crime. Others, however, argue that the circumstances of an individual crime, and the motivation for committing it, should always be taken into account when deciding on the punishment. v. 14
To date, we have thousands of laws, regulations, general rules enumerated to ensure our society functions as it should be. However, these restrictions could never be enough to cover every circumstance that happened around-the-clock. Therefore, should the law be our gospel for us to follow strictly without deviation? Or should we perceive each case as an individual and take multiple factors into considerations? My opinion is definitely on the latter. For people who value law as an impregnable principle, the law itself would surpass human judgments. Humanity could be a defection when coming to talk about righteousness. Sentiments and bias might get in the way and eventually lead to miscalculation and unjustness, resulting in man-made errors, a horrendous failure for justice. Despite the fact that human error is almost inevitable, people still believe taking certain factors into consideration is genuinely legitimate. Laws are considered to the most basic requirement of human morality, making it the reason why this issue has become controversial. People might have broken the law yet the motivation behind such deed could alter our interpretation to it. The main character in the Opera “Les miserable” stole a loaf of bread because he was almost starved to death; a young heroin addict pickpocketed a wallet to cater for his cravings. These two cases above are both thievery, yet the morality standard was hardly even. Our cognition helps us reconsider and adjust our decisions and prevent us from nonchalantly putting the same amount of punishment on these two men without pondering over some more congruous solution. The law could be the guidance, a foundation of our ethic standards. Nevertheless, we still have to make room for flexibilities and consider every crime as an individual.
To date, we have thousands of
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laws
, regulations, general
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rules
enumerated to ensure our society functions as it should be.
However
, these restrictions could never be
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enough
to cover every circumstance that happened around-the-clock.
Therefore
, should the
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law
be our gospel for us to follow
strictly
without deviation? Or should we perceive each case as an individual and take multiple factors into considerations? My opinion is definitely on the latter.

For
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people
who value
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law
as an impregnable principle, the
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law
itself would surpass human judgments. Humanity could be a defection when coming to talk about righteousness. Sentiments and bias might
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get
in the way and
eventually
lead to miscalculation and
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unjustness
, resulting in
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man
-made errors, a horrendous failure for justice.

Despite the fact that human error is almost inevitable,
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people
still
believe taking certain factors into consideration is
genuinely
legitimate.
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Laws
are considered
to the most basic requirement of human morality, making it the reason why this issue has become controversial.
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People
might have broken the
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law
yet
the motivation behind such deed could alter our interpretation to it. The main character in the Opera “Les miserable” stole a loaf of bread
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because
he was almost starved to death; a young heroin addict
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pickpocketed
a wallet to cater for his cravings. These two cases above are both thievery,
yet
the morality standard was hardly even. Our cognition
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
helps
us reconsider and adjust our decisions and
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prevent
us from
nonchalantly
putting the same amount of punishment on these two
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men
without pondering over
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
more congruous solution.

The
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law
could be the guidance, a foundation of our ethic standards.
Nevertheless
, we
still
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have to
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make
room for
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flexibilities
and consider every crime as an individual.
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IELTS essay Some people believe that there should be a fixed punishment for each type of crime. Others, however, argue that the circumstances of an individual crime, and the motivation for committing it, should always be taken into account when deciding on the punishment. v. 14

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4 paragraphs
285 words
5.5
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