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Some people believe that there should be a fixed punishment for each type of crime. Others, however, argue that the circumstances of an individual crime, and the motivation for committing it, should always be taken into account when deciding on the punishment. v.13

Some people believe that there should be a fixed punishment for each type of crime. Others, however, argue that the circumstances of an individual crime, and the motivation for committing it, should always be taken into account when deciding on the punishment. v. 13
In recent days, there is an ongoing debate on how to give appropriate punishment toward people who accused with criminal activities. Some state that they should be punished by looking at the type of crime they have committed, while some people believe that the circumstance and reason of committing a crime should be given a high priority while accusing someone of the crime. However, I personally argue that these ideas are definitely true and through this essay, I will support these views with some considerations below. Nowadays, the fact shows that there are some cases given an injustice punishment toward a criminal. For instance, a grandmother stole three chocolates last year and she had to spend times in prison for several years. In contrast of the corruptors stealing a plenty of money from society but punished only a year and completed by a good service from the police. In short, the law of government should review and rearrange the constitution when deciding on the punishment. They should think of the punishment types as the consideration on punishment decision. Turing to the other arguments, the government also should pay attention to the reason why people have committed criminalities. For example, there are some cases which show the most reason of committing crime are economic problems. A lot of people have no job thus they prefer to do misconduct to fulfil their daily need. The most obvious solution is by taking the motivation of criminals as an essential consideration in giving punishment. As a result, I truly believe that these ideas are the essential consideration that can encounter the social justice.
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toward a criminal.
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, a grandmother stole three chocolates last
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stealing a
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a year and completed by a
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service from the police. In short, the law of
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government
should review and rearrange the constitution when deciding on the
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. They should
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types as the
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decision.

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also
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people
have committed
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criminalities
.
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, there are
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some
cases which
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show
the most reason of committing
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crime
are economic problems.
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A lot of
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people
have no job
thus
they prefer to do misconduct to fulfil their daily need. The most obvious solution is by taking the motivation of criminals as an essential
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consideration
in giving punishment.

As a result
, I
truly
believe that these
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ideas
are the essential
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consideration
that can encounter the social justice.
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IELTS essay Some people believe that there should be a fixed punishment for each type of crime. Others, however, argue that the circumstances of an individual crime, and the motivation for committing it, should always be taken into account when deciding on the punishment. v. 13

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