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Some people believe that the only purpose of films is to entertain. But others say films should have educational value. Discuss both views and give your opinion. v.6

Some people believe that the only purpose of films is to entertain. But others say films should have educational value. v. 6
Nowadays, the film industry is very popular that many think it is purely made for leisure purposes. Others suggest that individuals should be acquiring knowledge from it as well. My view is that, people should watch movies to have fun and learn at the same time. On the one side, most of the people who think that the sole purpose of movies are for entertainment came from the older age group. This is due to the fact that the very first films are made for this reason, and so, it was passed on to the next generations. One of the very first films, made in 1900s, was the movie called Three Stoogies, which became very popular because of its comedic plot. This notion is very hard to change, especially those who are brought up in that era. However, I believe that in watching motion pictures, people can both be entertained and gain information correspondingly because many of the shows today are considerate to this idea. For instance, medical students like watching the show Scrubs for it gives them enjoyment and at the same time, the show gives details about patients’ cases, which enhances their familiarity about it. Another one that helps individuals is a movie that involves cooking. Through this, many persons who do not know how to cook, and become successful in their cooking professions. In conclusion, some people are still firm that films are mainly for leisure, but I would argue that it can be educational as well. Nevertheless, every individual should be cautious of what they watch and discern if it is helping them to become better people; giving them the true and accurate rather than false information.
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to have fun and learn at the same time.

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people
who
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think
that the sole purpose of
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movies
are for entertainment came from the older age group.
This is due to the fact that
the
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very
first
films
are made
for this reason
, and
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so
, it
was passed
on to the
next
generations. One of the
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very
first
films, made
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, was the
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movie
called Three
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Stoogies
, which became
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very
popular
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because
of its comedic plot. This notion is
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very
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hard
to
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change
,
especially
those who
are brought
up in that era.

However
, I believe that in watching motion pictures,
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people
can both
be entertained
and gain information
correspondingly
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because
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of the
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shows
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today
are considerate to this
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idea
.
For instance
, medical students like watching the
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show
Scrubs for it gives them enjoyment and at the same time, the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
show
gives
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details
about patients’ cases, which enhances their familiarity about it. Another one that
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helps
individuals is a
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movie
that involves cooking. Through this,
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many
persons who do not know how to cook, and become successful in their cooking professions.

In conclusion
,
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some
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people
are
still
firm that films are
mainly
for leisure,
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but
I would argue that it can be educational
as well
.
Nevertheless
, every individual should be cautious of what they
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watch
and discern if it is helping them to become better
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people
; giving them the true and accurate
rather
than false information.
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8Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
8Mistakes

IELTS essay Some people believe that the only purpose of films is to entertain. But others say films should have educational value. v. 6

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
281 words
8
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
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  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 8.0
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  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
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  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 8.0
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